Have you ever ?

Started by fenderbender, November 22, 2015, 05:35:18 PM

fenderbender

Have you ever tried to write lyrics so nothing will rhyme ;D ;D ;D ;D
It's not that easy - ;D ;D ;D ;D
You automatically will find a word that finishes off the line or chorus in rhyme

" Johnny walked out the door
Swore he would come back no............
time in the future" ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Just asking like  ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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AndyR

:D Yes, I have, and I decided that it's most unhealthy to attempt non-rhyming lyrics (or even poetry!)

By the way - you've already got a bit of an internal rhyme going on there ... door/swore
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   All that I need
Is just a piece of paper
To say a few lines
Make up my mind
So she can read it later
When I'm gone

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Hook

I never mind
the unorthodox path
this distance traveled
strengthens us
Opens our minds
frees our hearts
leads us into
places unexplored

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well

Conforming to expectations
none of which are mine
to be studied and examined
left unexplained

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well

Mission bells chime
off in the distance
a reminder of simple things
that reach no destination

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well





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Quote from: Hook on November 23, 2015, 07:48:13 AMI never mind
the unorthodox path
this distance traveled
strengthens us
Opens our minds
frees our hearts
leads us into
places unexplored

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well

Conforming to expectations
none of which are mine
to be studied and examined
left unexplained

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well

Mission bells chime
off in the distance
a reminder of simple things
that reach no destination

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well







wOw.....

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If I had known i was going to be this thirsty this morning I'd of had another Beer last night...

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Farrell Jackson

How about almost no rhymes but no chorus? Here's one I quickly jotted down but a few rhymes snuck in...so yes, for me, is is difficult to keep the rhymes out.

When In Rome

I'm sittin in Rome,  
Missed my train
Feelin' abandoned
Longing for home

Not another
'til four more hours
So here I sit
On my suitcase tower

Watchin' people rush by
I don't understand a word
Maybe a capachino  
Would help pass the time

So many people in a hurry
Almost got pick pocketed
But for a watchfull eye
Not much in my wallet anyway

My only friend a pigeon
Looking for a hand out
As the other lost souls
Try to read the schedules

I don't know if this trip
Will turn out good or bad
It's the steps I need to take
To erase the memory of her

I guess if I wasn't here
I'd still be somewhere else
But that's neither here nor there
Right now I'm going no where

Waitin' for the next train
To take me down the tracks
To pull me away from the pain
That's turned my heart black

Farrell Jackson © 11-28-15

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Farrell Jackson

Quote from: Hook on November 23, 2015, 07:48:13 AMI never mind
the unorthodox path
this distance traveled
strengthens us
Opens our minds
frees our hearts
leads us into
places unexplored

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well

Conforming to expectations
none of which are mine
to be studied and examined
left unexplained

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well

Mission bells chime
off in the distance
a reminder of simple things
that reach no destination

          within the whisper
          lies the rhyme
          it waits to be discovered
          but has hidden far to well






Cool words Hook!

Farrell
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bruno

I have a rhyming dictionary, which can be useful - as it gives words that you wouldn't necessarily think off. That said, I hardly ever write lyrics :-)
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bruno

violets are blue,
roses are red,
some rhymes rhyme,
but this one doesn't ....
     
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fenderbender

 ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
some great stuff there  ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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Groundy

The boy stood on the burning deck,
His face as black as Charcoal.
He put his head between his legs,
And whistled up his Nose.....

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If I had known i was going to be this thirsty this morning I'd of had another Beer last night...

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