Too Many Songs in my Head - original blues

[hardlock]

I'm proud of this tune as the more I learn the better I get and the more I can stand my material.....

That said, it's off the MBR and processed with Audacity - my first attempt.  Working out the envelope functions and stuff I can't easily do direct on the MBR.  Thought I'd post this rough draft before I put it on Soundclick in case you guys can find my screwups. 

PLEASE, I don't need my ego boosted here but would really like to get some serious constructive criticism from the amazing amount of talented producers here.  Let me have it guys, I can take it, really!

Thanks!
Ken

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-Too Many Songs- (in my head) (c) 2010 Ken J Hill
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   Got too many songs in my head
   Gettin' busy if I want them said
   
   No one listens though nothing to lose
   Guess I'll keep on playing the blues
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Did my job nothing left to do
But I still have a tale or two

I lived my life in overdrive
Now I just try to (and) survive
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Choices made have come to pass
Not all good but built to last

Isn't it time to get it straight
Can't be happy if you're filled with hate
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Done my time and paid my dues
Now I get to pick and choose

Life's a deal you should agree
(Just) Take a look and you will see
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[Redler]

This is just a fine blues song, Ken! I can't say what would have been done on other way...I'm sorry . The tune, gtr, your voice and production works well!

Kari

[Gu Djin]

No producer here.  I just listen to the song and performance.  And this good a good happy sounding blues song - I love contradictions in music.  Makes life interesting.

All works well for me.

Leigh

[Bluesberry]

Great song Ken.  It is really good to hear you singing on your songs.  I think the vocals are a tad too loud, either bring them down a tiny bit or bring the rhythm guitars up a bit. 
actually thats what I would do is bring the rhythm guitars up in volume, leave that lead guitar alone during the singing.  Maybe bring the bass up a tad too.  Other that that this is a great song.  Your voice sounds really good here,  Guitar is singing so sweet, great playing there (of course).  Nice bouncy blues with a bite in the lyrics, I like that.  You keep writing songs like this and the great comments will come pouring in.

[The Gobi Desert Canoe Club]

Good song played and sung well, I agree with Bluesberry that maybe the levels need adjusting slightly but if you've heard any of my stuff I've certainly got no room to talk. I enjoyed and will download.   Willie

[MeanGreenLizard]

Good song!
You're raspy voice fits the style very well!

[Tony W]

excellent music right here. I love the composition and performance. I really enjoy your vocals as well, especially the well laid out backing vox.

[SwanSong]

VERY well executed original song. i agree with the mixing the vocals could
come down a bit. a little less dominating. over all a good song and for
singing . a great start. for someone who does not have much vocal esperience
thumbs up and wonderful listen TC NEIL

[Gary F]

A really great blues song Ken!!! You've got some really sweet guitar licks going on here!! You have a great voice but I agree with the others, it could be lowered just a little in the mix but, most of my vocals turn out too low!!
A very enjoyable listen!!!
Gary

[Oldrottenhead]

magic ken great to hear you singing too