Keepers of Redemption - hardlock original - hard rock?

[hardlock]

I didn't get any help on this from the collaboration board so finished it myself (vocals and all - yuk) but felt it needed to be said.  Critical comments always welcome  

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Here's the lyrics:

   Keepers of Redemption (c) 2010 Ken J Hill
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   We are the keepers of redemption
   The founders of the cause
   The minders of dissension
   The makers of the laws
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   With the will of corporation
   The power of major wealth
   We may just buy your nation
   Our wreath you've never felt.....
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   It happened when least expected
   No one thought it could be true
   The market crashed as though rejected
   Not that many made it through
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   Saw a bloated housing bubble
   We knew it couldn't last
   Empty assets are always trouble
   Like all the junk bonds of the past
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   Bets were fixed - not a gamble
   Those that won knew it in advance
   Too late now to try to scramble
   Hit and run didn't have a chance
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   The game is over - now we pay the tole
   The rich got richer - the crooks have won
   The greed of evil will eat their soul
   Better watch your back there's no place to run
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If anyone wants to play with this, the backing track is here:

https://songcrafters.org/community/index.php?topic=7501.msg97630#msg97630

Have fun with it - I did!  

[launched]

The vocals were really good, and killer lead too. Powerful stuff in places.

Very cool!

Mark

[Oldrottenhead]

magic hardlock, nothing wrong with your voice its great, great song too, we want more.

[hardlock]

Wow, thanks guys for the encouragement!  Guess I'm my own worst critic but can't get past how I sound to myself! 

[Greeny]

A snappy and tuneful rocker. You don't need any help! Very nicely done. I like the restrained power of this one a lot.

[Donkeydoo]

Great song, Great lyrics we can all relate too also your voice sounds great too.

[Bluesberry]

Now this is a real treat to hear a full on complete song from you Ken, keep at it, keep them coming.  Your singing is great.  Thats a seriously lyrical melodic yet sorta heavy solo there, sounds like your Tele here, crispy and full sound to your guitar, I really like that tone on the solos.  Great song Ken.

[Ferryman_1957]

This sounds great, love the guitar riffs and the solos, also the lyrics are good as well - nice powerful sentiment there. i thought the vox came across pretty well, you should try some more. Don't be too heavy on the effects on the vox - they would actually sound better if they cut through a bit clearer IMO. Well done, and kudos for the vox!

Cheers,

Nigel

[Jim1970]

Great rockin tune!!!
Vocals sound great and fit well!!
Keep em Commin!!!
JIM from Jersey

[Vanncad]

Good tune Hardlock!

Sounds a little like you're reading from a page though. Put some emotion into that vocal and I think you will notice a great improvement.

You've got a great riff and guitar work here. I'd be interested to hear it recorded with real drums.