We're Done (LITLR) - AndyR Original

[AndyR]

Another Songwriting Demo for FAWM 2022

Song number 13.

I had a lot of trouble with this yesterday.
I actually binned it.
I never wanted to see it, sing it, or hear it ever again.

But I need the songs... I wanna be finished!
So this morning, I took the only complete take I had from yesterday, did some trickery on it and here's the demo.
The mic placement wasn't quite right, so vocal/guitar balance isn't what I'd want.

If it wasn't FAWM, I'd sit on this one, it could improve with a band arrangement - where it would work so much better - but I'm not sure I actually like the song itself.
(I know others do - Mrs R does - but I don't)

We're Done

Words & Music AndyR
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You still look so fine
Like you did
When you said you'd be mine
We were only kids
Soon we'll hear others say
But you guys were the dream
It always seemed
That you guys were a team

But we're done
So done
And we won't feel ashamed
We got out
Just in time
And nobody got maimed
We're done

You know I love you still
Always will
I know you feel the same
We tried patch it up
And soldier on
We played reignite the flame
Soon we'll hear the whispers
How selfish those two are
How did they get away
With so few scars

And we're done
So done
We don't feel ashamed
Yeah we got out
Heads held high
Noone else to blame

If we tried like others seem
To want us to behave
To hang on to
Some thing we cannot save

No we are done
So done
Let's not be ashamed
Let's celebrate
What we had
Forget the pain

We are done
So done
Never feel ashamed
That we got out
Just in time
And nobody got maimed
We're done

Copyright (C) 2022 A A J Russe. All Rights Reserved.

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[chapperz66]

I tell you what - I think it's fine.  You are being unnecessarily hard on yourself -but then that's what being a musician is all about - isn't it?

It absolutely works for me.  Yes you would undoubtedly be able to hone it here and there - but that's not what your current task is all about.

I spend hours faffing about with stuff which, to be frank, few others will notice, and even fewer will care. And often I don't even like it myself....

It is a good song and a great performance.

[StephenM]

I really enjoyed reading Paul's comments above...because it is true...very true Paul... one thing I would add to Paul's observations are that in the end we want to post something we are (proud) of?  That we like or at least would not be ashamed to have others hear.  Lets face it we pour ourselves into this "work" of ours.... that is why I like this site... there are others here who recognize the greatness that we share with each other...and acknowledge it... and even if someone comes on here and is at least trying even if the recordings aren't great, they will be encouraged. 
I really enjoy your work Andy and that has only grown in the last few weeks more with your courage to post these bare bone songs (that are ranging from good to damn good to great (that is just my opinion..ha for what it isn't worth)...
I really do also appreciate all the amzing details that go into recordings like Chap does...

[Mike_S]

It's amazing how we all hear and see things differently. I think you are right this would sound good in a full band situation, but there is something about the naked vocal and 1 guitar that seems to tell a very honest story. For my money you have captured a lot of raw feeling, that sometimes can get lost when songs are over rehearsed. But it's swings and roundabouts... yes you can get better technical performances when you put more hours in, but there is just that enthusiasm and energy that is alive in buckets in spontaneous recordings like this. Loved it.

Mike