Sleepless Night

[Geir]

Wellll .. here's the deal .... I've got a new song ... well it's been in my head for quite a while but it "landed" tonight. It's really just a rough take so I can get some feedback as to where to go with it.

I apologize for any abuse of the fine English language as it's not my mother tongue. ....

Well any input is appreciated.

G.

 

[Wiley]

You are off to a great start!   I loved it.   Your English was fine.   I think it would be nice to hear a song from all of you  in your native languages.   Kind of romantic to us country girls. LOL

[Kody]

I like it...You could take this one alot further~or you could leave it like it is~very cool...

I couldn't imagine singing in a different language~ I know just english~ nothing else~ I tried to learn some spanish, but gave up...Man, you have my respect!

[lg]

This was nice.
I liked it alot.

LG

[Greeny]

Did you write this? Even if English was your FIRST language, the lyrics are great. The fact that it isn't your first language makes them remarkable. I really like the feel and vulnerability of this song. The strumming pulls you in, and you have a nice tone to your voice. This is really good work!

[The Reverend 48]

Did you write this? Even if English was your FIRST language, the lyrics are great. The fact that it isn't your first language makes them remarkable. I really like the feel and vulnerability of this song. The strumming pulls you in, and you have a nice tone to your voice. This is really good work!

Totally agree with Tim...Well Done

[tafka]

what a great song this is. i would of liked to hear a bit more guitar.
it sounded like Gordon Gilltrap to me.
great stuff.

Tony J.

[Ferryman_1957]

Sounds great to me as well. Just needs bass, drums and some subtle electric guitar and you have a killer there! The lyrics are great, very impressive for soemone who does not have English as a first language.

Looking forward to the next version as you take this forward.

Cheers,

Nigel

[guitarron]

Sounds great to me as well. Just needs bass, drums and some subtle electric guitar and you have a killer there! The lyrics are great, very impressive for soemone who does not have English as a first language.

Looking forward to the next version as you take this forward.

Cheers,

Nigel

agreed-i love the tone of the 12 string-what setup did you use?

[Bluesberry]

Nice harmonies on the chorus.  This is excellent.  The strumming guitar sounds really good, that part at the end is great.  Great start to a super song for sure.  I am not sure where to go with this, you will know what to add if it needs anything.  I think a nice acoustic lead line would be good, a small acoustic guitar solo in the middle maybe.  That ending chord progression would sound really good done with a clean Strat sound strumming those chords.  It also sounds good just like this all stripped down.  If you put drums, bass, electric guitar, on this it will change the sound quite a bit.