Unions (Poem/Fx)

[SteveB]

Something of an experiment. From over in the Poetry Thread in GD.

UNIONS

At Central Street, a wedding group,
Its Civil duty duly done.
(A legal climax achieved)
Is now at the camera-in-the-courtyard-stage,
As I continue passing through,
Tremulous, to a rendezvous.

Bride and Groom, I presume,
Central, and half-ribald in
Exclamation -
She, un-demure, shrieks with suggestion
At the loud woman in the wide-brimmed hat:
'Oh, mam, give over!'.
While He, wedded, draws deeply on his first
Husband cigarette.

They're only kids, I think to myself,
What future have they got?
As they all line up reluctantly, for -
'Just one more, with Aunty Dot'.

Just kids. But even I must know, surely -
That they are the future. Because a future
Must be, somewhere. Unsurprisingly,

The normally-cold receptionist spies me,
Singly, as I enter the short corridor.
She ventures, human and warm:
'Go right in, would you. The doctor has your results.'

[Hilary]

It's not what I was expecting but very interesting. Good to hear your voice/accent and your phrasing. The poem's very clever and intelligent.

Have you thought about writing a novel?

If ever I were to have a writing partner it would be you Stevie!

(what's GD btw?)

[Redler]

Sometimes it is nice to hear some unexpected track! The poem is fine! Backround noises put some excitement to this!

[The Gobi Desert Canoe Club]

Oh my, I'm getting soft in my old age, this actually raised a tear to these old eyes. When members take the time to post lyrics I nearly always read them as poetry. I think lyricists do write quite amazing poetry whether they know it or not. Steve I would enjoy more of your work if you could point me in the right direction. Roscoe

[SteveB]

Thanks for the comments Peeps.  

Haylie I've sent you a PM about yer query.

I actually hand-held the microphone and walked around the room while reciting this, trying to convey the breathlessness of passing-by a wedding. Not too sure yet if I've got the level right.

In the UK, the Doctor's receptionists, tend to know everything.

Cheers.

[andy casson]

Steve I thoroughly enjoyed this, very clever chap! I loved the approach for the delivery, accent and phrasing as well, quite brilliant! And I agree... those receptionists do seem to know everything

Andy

[Ferryman_1957]

Very interesting and different. Great lyrics/poem, very well done and the recording is effective, you do sound like you are walking around outside. This would make a great prog rock epic you know....

[SteveB]

This would make a great prog rock epic you know...

Thanks for the further listens/comments.

Prog Rock?? Hmm, a bit beyond my talents, I'll pass that one over to Frank, that's his Ballpark.

[Geir]

Interesting indeed. And very well performed. I could hear this as a prelude to some prog instrumental.

(what's GD btw?)

I was wondering about that too ...

[Hilary]

Interesting indeed. And very well performed. I could hear this as a prelude to some prog instrumental.

(what's GD btw?)

I was wondering about that too ...

it's a secret between Stevie and me -