"The Run" - original song... based on observations of people on the Tube :3

[olafgoesraawr]

Hello fellow songwriters,

I have just joined this forum, my name is Olaf, I'm 17, and I hope to exchange songs with you guys and share experiences.

This is the link to my self-written song on ebutuoy:


http://www.ebutuoy.com/watch?v=A-CYYZtvD3U&feature=ebutuoy_gdata_player

It has only taken me about 20 minutes to write and compose it, so it's still pretty rough. I might re-record it soon, but I'd love to hear some of your feedback first!

Thanks :3

[danieldesete]

Hey Olaf welcome to this great site.

Your video is just the perfect way of introducing yourself. clever guitar strumming and very natural vox. big well done sir.

please post many more

daniel

[olafgoesraawr]

Getting a reply after 10 minutes; I can tell this is indeed a great site!

Thanks very much for your comment, I know I have a lot to work on, but it's encouraging

Would you like me to review any of your stuff?

[Oldrottenhead]

way to introduce yourself olaf. great recording despite having no recording gear. you need to ask santa for a micro br or something.

[Hook]

Welcome Olaf, you have a nice tune there with some really good lyrics.
Rock On!

[steelguitar]

Welcome here Olaf!
Really nice voice, excellent song
Love your chord progression, reminds me Jeff Buckley

A constructive critic : for me, if you record it again, work the regularity of tempo on guitar (difficult for all of us, and myself!) and the fretting of your chords (1:07 - 1:13, 3:10-3:16, 3:32-3:40 for exemple)
The vocals are perfect for me

Agree with oldrottenhead : "great recording despite having no recording gear. you need to ask santa for a micro br or something."

Great original

Jean-Sébastien

[AndyR]

Cool song. You've got a great voice as well.

Welcome

[SwanSong]

HI Olaf...congrats on a great song. and very good singing.
u must continue ur musical journey . i enjoyed this for
sure cheers and the best to you NEIL