Old demo song... "les perdants alignés", guitar / vocals by steelguitar

Started by steelguitar, October 23, 2012, 11:22:28 AM

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This is a 7 months old demo song in french...
I'm lazy, and I don't changed or improved anything for the moment in this song...
I post it to have some of your impressions...
Jean-Sébastien

Post Scriptum (06/11/2012) : lyrics translation by Haylie

Triste, le cœur se fend
Je suis comme un enfant
Qui a laissé six billes
Pour qu'ailleurs elles brillent

J'ai cru à tes paroles,
Aimé tes idées folles,
Désirs . Un désastre,
Mais tes yeux, des astres...

Lune claire de tes jours
Tu espères et je cours...
Soleil noir de mes nuits
Je t'appelle et tu fuis...

Ce baiser du matin
La tiédeur de tes mains,
J'ai si froid, c'était toi
Pour la dernière fois

Étoiles fugaces
Ne laissent de trace
Les éclairs éternels
Tisseront notre ciel!

Lune claire de tes jours
Tu espères et je cours...
Soleil noir de mes nuits
Je t'appelle et tu fuis...

Des questions sans réponse...
Et moi je renonce :
Qui pourra endurer
Tes pensées torturées ?

Ton amour explose
Jamais ne se pose...
Je compte par milliers
Des perdants alignés

Soleil noir de mes nuits
Je t'appelle et tu fuis...
Lune claire de tes jours
Tu espères et je cours...

Triste, le cœur se fend – sadness breaks my heart
Je suis comme en enfant – I'm like a child
Qui a laisse six billes – who's left his 6 marbles
Pour qu'ailleurs elles brillent – they shine  elsewhere

J'ai cru a tes paroles – I believed what you said
Aime tes idées folles – Loved your silly ideas
Désirs – un désastre – Desire.  A disaster !
Mes tes yeux, des astres – but your eyes were stars

Lune claire de tes jours – the bright moon of your days
Tu espères et je cours – you hope and I run
Soleil noir de mes nuits – the black sun of my nights
Je t'appelle et tu fuis – I call you and you flee

Ce baiser du matin - ? kisses in the morning
La tiédeur de tes mains, the warmth of your hands
J'ai si froid, c'était toi ? I'm so cold, it was you
Pour la dernière fois – for the last time

Étoiles fugaces – Fleeting stars
Ne laissent de trace – don't leave a trace
Les éclairs éternels – Eternal lightnings
Tisseront notre ciel! – weaves our sky

Lune claire de tes jours – bright moon of your days
Tu espères et je cours... – you hope and I run
Soleil noir de mes nuits – the black sun of my nights
Je t'appelle et tu fuis... – I call you and you flee

Des questions sans réponse... – questions but no answer
Et moi je renonce : and me, I give up
Qui pourra endurer – who will be enough strong to endure
Tes pensées torturées ? – your tortured thoughts ?

Ton amour explose – your love exploded
Jamais ne se pose... – is never in peace
Je compte par milliers – I count millions
Des perdants alignés – of loosers aligned

Soleil noir de mes nuits – the black sun of my nights
Je t'appelle et tu fuis... – I call you and you flee
Lune claire de tes jours – the bright moon of your days
Tu espères et je cours... – you hope and I run
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"I'm sitting on a comet / Slowing speed / I'm landing on your planet / On your land of weed" Daniel (de Sète)

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danieldesete

a petty most people here do not speak a word of French. you are a genuine poet my friend. good guitar piking too.
thanks for sharing
Daniel
hou hou ha ha

Hilary

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comme ci, comme ça

Carpy

This song caught my ear.  I love the guitar work especially the turnarounds.  Wish I knew what it was about.  :-)
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Hi, a most enjoyable listen, have you thought about tranlating to english? It doesn't really matter, it's still a lovely song..........Willie
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steelguitar

Thank you all for your kind comments!!!
To Carpy and Willie Wendon about a translation of the lyrics : euh... I don't think I am able to do that properly... Perhaps with the help of Daniel who have a (very) higher level than me in english...
I will post it if Daniel is Ok to help me...
These lyrics are about the paradoxal relationships sometimes (always?) existing in human relations, especially in love. It's the story of the end of a love with a woman, a description of what is not right in that woman's way of loving, with a distant eye about it.
Jean-Sébastien
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"I'm sitting on a comet / Slowing speed / I'm landing on your planet / On your land of weed" Daniel (de Sète)

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Hook

Part of me wants to know the lyrics and part of me doesn't, I love the mystery of the tune when I don't what's being said. This tune holds such great mystery to me, your vocal delivery is excellent, full of emotion yet cool and controlled.The guitar sounds very cool, I really dig this tune!
Rock On!

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Because the Hook brings you back
I ain't tellin' you no lie
The hook brings you back
On that you can rely

Redler

Fine job, Jean-Sébastien! This is awesome man and guitar song. i like your playing and singing!

Kari
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flyon90

Good song, I wish I would have payed attention in my high school French class.

steelguitar

Thank you all for your nice and kind comments!

Haylie has made a beautyful translation of the lyrics (with littles changes added by me).
I am very pleased to show you her translation, very close to the lyrics in french
Hope you will like it!
Jean-Sébastien

Triste, le cœur se fend – Sadness breaks my heart
Je suis comme en enfant – I'm like a child
Qui a laisse six billes – Who's left his 6 marbles
Pour qu'ailleurs elles brillent – They shine elsewhere

J'ai cru à tes paroles – I believed what you said
Aimé tes idées folles – Loved your silly ideas
Désirs – un désastre – Desire.  A disaster !
Mes tes yeux, des astres – But your eyes were stars

Lune claire de tes jours – The bright moon of your days
Tu espères et je cours – You hope and I run
Soleil noir de mes nuits – The black sun of my nights
Je t'appelle et tu fuis – I call you and you flee

Ce baiser du matin -  Kisses in the morning
La tiédeur de tes mains,  The warmth of your hands
J'ai si froid, c'était toi ? I'm so cold, it was you
Pour la dernière fois – For the last time

Étoiles fugaces – Fleeting stars
Ne laissent de trace – Don't leave a trace
Les éclairs éternels – Eternal lightnings
Tisseront notre ciel! – Weaves our sky

Lune claire de tes jours – Bright moon of your days
Tu espères et je cours... – You hope and I run
Soleil noir de mes nuits – The black sun of my nights
Je t'appelle et tu fuis... – I call you and you flee

Des questions sans réponse... – Questions but no answer
Et moi je renonce : And me, I give up
Qui pourra endurer – Who will be enough strong to endure
Tes pensées torturées ? – Your tortured thoughts ?

Ton amour explose – Your love exploded
Jamais ne se pose... – Is never in peace
Je compte par milliers – I count millions
Des perdants alignés – Of loosers aligned

Soleil noir de mes nuits – The black sun of my nights
Je t'appelle et tu fuis... – I call you and you flee
Lune claire de tes jours – The bright moon of your days
Tu espères et je cours... – You hope and I run
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Boss Micro BR


"I'm sitting on a comet / Slowing speed / I'm landing on your planet / On your land of weed" Daniel (de Sète)

https://www.facebook.com/TheMAUSS