Let's ALL collaborate! (NOW FINISHED!!)

Hook · July 15, 2012, 06:48:34 PM

We'll make it optional so you'll have to try a bit harder ORH if you want credit! I'm digging this 3 solid stanzas, someone start a 4th

My inner eye needs glasses (Hook)
As my life's path is not clear (Kenny Mac)
The fog of anxiety creeps whenever you are near(thetworegs)
I pause to reflect at the end of the day (Andy Casson)
To find solace as desolation passes (Mach)

Through this eye I've always seen truth (Hook)
And in my youth, sometimes beauty (cuthbert)
shaddy bo (ORH) (optional)
This robbery of time is a chapter in etiquette (Burtog)
Like a thief in the night of selfish benefit (Farrell)
Her silhouette waved goodbye and with it went hope(the two regs)

A Lost Summer storm passing in the night (Mach)
Finds it's way to the ground, never one place twice. (launched)
There is no shelter... There is no solice (Rata)
I take my chances ... And roll the dice (Kenny B)
If this eye could only see the price(Hook)

kenny mac · July 15, 2012, 06:52:26 PM

Think we need to have a chorus that we can revert back to?any ideas.

Hook · July 15, 2012, 07:08:17 PM

I write songs often that don't lyrically have a refrain so I think with this one let's continue with the one line at a time thing. I was thinking maybe 5 stanzas. Just because the lyrics don't repeat in a chorus section doesn't mean the song can't have a chorus section. And the stanza breaks I've given are just ideas they are in no ways set in stone.

64Guitars · July 15, 2012, 07:53:06 PM

Quote from: oldrottenhead on July 15, 2012, 05:36:20 AM
Quote from: Hook on July 15, 2012, 05:12:03 AMWhat the hell does "shaddy bo" mean orh?

i was drunk lol. you know the song "sonny boy" drunk pub singers sing it as shaddy bo lol.

Quote from: kenny mac on July 15, 2012, 06:44:29 PMSHADDY BO? YIV GOAT TAE BE KIDDIN ,LOL Ill never fit that in tae a song,Im from glasgow and I get wot he means. and its no rite.

Just a suggestion, but maybe sober oldrottenhead should post a replacement for the line submitted by drunk oldrottenhead. That's assuming that sober oldrottenhead makes an appearance in the next couple of days.

We all know that the creative genius of sober oldrottenhead can come up with something much better than "shaddy bo".

Would the short form of "sober oldrottenhead" be SORhead?

T.C. Elliott · July 15, 2012, 08:59:54 PM

There is always the option of forming a chorus from some of the submitted lines (or partial lines etc.) Or maybe one line from each stanza? Or having a through composed song or... lots of possibilities. Having an umpire that can decide is pretty awesome.