Safety Line

[indierik]

This is needs some more work but i just wanted to get a wee bit of feedback on it before I mess with it some more.

[djbride]

I really like the progression and the guitar parts you have.
Drum track sound good.
Maybe some piano or organ to fill in and I think it would make an improvement.
Sounds good as is also.


Dave

[ODH]

I like the sound overall and would suggest thinking about a couple of things

• Light and shade - it's all much the same level / intensity at present
• Maybe lacking direction?  Seems to link a number of different sections together, could do with better definition between sections (this might go away when vocals are added)

The final section could do with racking up the intensity in the drums.  I would probably reduce the levels on the guitars and add a bunch of reverb, but that's just me...

Look forward to the evolution

[indierik]

Thanks guy's, I appreciate the feedback! You've giving me some good ideas. I think a couple of spots are dragged out and it needs to be trimmed and tightened up. Nick, i agree on light and shade, or as I call it dynamics, it needs some variation with the levels of intensity.

I sincerely appreciate the constructive criticism. 

[Gritter]

some good ideas. a vocal will help with the dynamics and direction. it sounds pleasant as is but could use a little intensity.

[FuzzFace]

Sounds cool.
Great playing, nifty arrangement and cool tones!