This is about the Atomic Bomb.
No one ever asks how the airplane feels.
This is the airplane's song.
* * * * Edit on May 6 2010 * * * * * *
Thanks to some comments from you I was able to improve the lyrics and make this song closer to what I want it to be.
I consider this my magnum opus.
(Every other song I've made was practice for this one).
Enjoy.
And once again, thank-you for the feedback and encouragement.
This forum and your friendship has enabled me to accomplish things I have always wanted to do.
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Here are the updated lyrics:
Put me in jail / lock me away
Deny my right / to see light of day
Chain me up / I'll reap what I sow
I can't pay the debt / to the world that I owe
Put me in jail / lock me away
Deny my right / to see light of day
Chain me up / I'll reap what I sow
I live with a pain / that I can't even know
Put me in jail / lock me away
Deny my right / to see light of day
Chain me up / I'll reap what I sow
Still feels like today / though it was so long ago
Thanks to Ferryman, Tony W and side effect for the idea to "double-up" the guitar. Makes a world of difference!
https://songcrafters.org/community/index.php?topic=7169.0
And thanks to 64Guitar's explanation that helped me break the "Bouncing Barrier".
Nothing will be the same again.
Put a Blue Monday beat to this & it will be ffckin monstrous.Woah U'v tapped in2 something my friend. :)
Would you care to share the lyrics? I would like to try something with your song, but can´t understand a couple of words in it (sorry, i´m portuguese). Your work caught my attention and I would like to add something in it, if its ok with you. Just an experiment.
Cheers
Very cool! Love how it rocks out in the second half.
Sweeet!
Mark
Talk about a duck on water, That guitar work sounds so much better already! The difference in quality is stunning. The acoustic work was fantastic, and of course the 2nd half is straight up rockin.
Quote from: xicpanad on May 03, 2010, 02:32:10 AMWould you care to share the lyrics? I would like to try something with your song, but can´t understand a couple of words in it (sorry, i´m portuguese). Your work caught my attention and I would like to add something in it, if its ok with you. Just an experiment.
Cheers
I don't mind at all, in fact I'm flattered.
Here are the lyrics:
Put me in jail
lock me away
deny my right
to see light of day
Chain me up
I'll reap what I sow
I can't pay the debt
to the world that I owe
I really dig this, FuzzFace. Great suspenseful buildup, and then BANG, a solid wall of sound.
cheers,
cuth
NICE!!! A well Produced Piece!!
I love how the Songs Kicks in and then out. Then in again.
JIM
COOL BASS piece Then BANG!!! you Explode into the Song!!
WOW that was cool!!!
JIM
Quote from: Jim1970 on May 03, 2010, 07:50:02 AMCOOL BASS piece Then BANG!!!
Thanks.
I was trying to figure out how to transition from "Pet Shop Boys throwback" to DOOM METAL.
The little bass lick seemed to do the trick.
The very short guitar "click!" of distortion right before the explosion is the sound of the Release Mechanism in the bomber's memory. (The "bomber" being the airplane. I'm not presuming to speak for the pilot).
What a strong performance FuzzFace! Fine tune and arrangement!! Really cool guitar sound in the end!
Kari
I am a big fan of songs that completely transform part way through, and really do like one a lot, its a very clever composition.
Those drums sound cool on the last part, are they BR drums?
Great Tune!!!!!
Builds into something real special!
Congrats on a really interesting approach to a song.
I've been to a handful of aircraft museums (including the Smithsonian Air and Space museum, where I saw and entered the fuselage of the Enola Gay before it was removed). Yet, there's always been an undefined feeling I've felt at these museums, and you've helped me to identify it.
Quote from: andrewh on May 03, 2010, 03:55:03 PMThose drums sound cool on the last part, are they BR drums?
No, I have a cheesy apartment-size Yamaha electronic drumkit.
Just go to the Yamaha website and type in "Cheesy" and you should find it. Ha ha.
Quote from: Ted on May 03, 2010, 04:45:25 PMI've been to a handful of aircraft museums (including the Smithsonian Air and Space museum, where I saw and entered the fuselage of the Enola Gay before it was removed). Yet, there's always been an undefined feeling I've felt at these museums, and you've helped me to identify it.
This is such a good comment. Thanks for mentioning it.
I have never been to an aircraft museum nor was I interested until I was recording this song, and it occurred to me it's something I should do.
I would like to develop the lyrics more, to somehow liken the airplane with the idea of Frankenstein's monster.
Although that could come off as an understatement.
Quote from: FuzzFace on May 03, 2010, 05:53:56 PMI would like to develop the lyrics more, to somehow liken the airplane with the idea of Frankenstein's monster.
Earlier I stopped short of suggesting that you fill out the lyrics a bit more. Instead I appreciated what you'd done for it's minimalism. But I can see why you would want to say more. Aviation is such a fantastic human achievement. Creating flight for the flightless is quite near creating life for the lifeless, and we regard it as a commonplace fact of life. But we have surpassed Icarus, Prometheus, and Mars: We have taken flight, stolen the heat of the sun, and hurled it at our enemies from our flying machines. Yet our warriors name the aircraft affectionately after their mothers, wives, and girlfriends. I'm not sure if I ever grasped that irony before.
Sorry for the rambling on there. Lyrical fodder, perhaps.
(BTW: You might check out my song
Monsters, Inc. (https://songcrafters.org/community/index.php?topic=4417.0), which has a related theme.)
THIS IS A BLAST OF NUCLEAR STYLE. great song
very well done with great variety of tempo s
and agree with all above comments well done Neil
Quote from: Ted on May 03, 2010, 07:27:39 PMSorry for the rambling on there. Lyrical fodder, perhaps.
(BTW: You might check out my song Monsters, Inc. (https://songcrafters.org/community/index.php?topic=4417.0), which has a related theme.)
I'm glad to have stimulated a discussion.
Your song is exactly along the same lines. And that book in your link looks really interesting as well.
I'm going to think about how to develop the idea a little more without taking away from the minimalistic quality.
Very imaginative piece, and I love that little bass link, great sound on that. There's much more presence to the song than your earlier work, it really rocks now with that "bigger" guitar sound. Drums sound great as well. Well done indeed!
Cheers,
Nigel
Quote from: xicpanad on May 03, 2010, 02:32:10 AMWould you care to share the lyrics? I would like to try something with your song, but can´t understand a couple of words in it (sorry, i´m portuguese). Your work caught my attention and I would like to add something in it, if its ok with you. Just an experiment.
Here are the updated lyrics:
Put me in jail / lock me away
Deny my right / to see light of day
Chain me up / I'll reap what I sow
I can't pay the debt / to the world that I owe
Put me in jail / lock me away
Deny my right / to see light of day
Chain me up / I'll reap what I sow
I live with a pain / that I can't even know
Put me in jail / lock me away
Deny my right / to see light of day
Chain me up / I'll reap what I sow
Still feels like today / though it was so long ago
Great song FF !!
Love all the different parts and the way they fit together
Quote from: Geir on May 06, 2010, 09:36:59 AMGreat song FF !!
Love all the different parts and the way they fit together
Thanks. I think I lowered the drums too much this time. It's lost the "DOOM METAL" quality to it.
Trevor, I like how this turned out!
Quote from: FuzzFace on May 06, 2010, 09:46:39 AMI think I lowered the drums too much this time. It's lost the "DOOM METAL" quality to it.
Sounded okay to me, but I was listening through my laptop built-in speakers. Remix? :)
Quote from: cuthbert on May 06, 2010, 12:32:07 PMTrevor, I like how this turned out!
Remix? :)
Thanks.
I changed some of the words because the first cut sounded like a broken record to me.
And the new lyrics round-out and reinforce the central idea.
I widened the panning on the guitars and lowered the drums to make the distortion crisper. However I miss the pounding drums now.
I don't typically finnick like this, but this is my pet song and I'm not ready to send it to school.
loved the guitar chord progression you have laid down , the bass just kicks and then it explodes into rock , great song Fuzzface great vox.
Dunny
This is now officially Awesome....
(http://awesomeland.co.uk/offical%20Seal%20of%20awesomeness2.jpg)
CooL song Fuzz, i dig the guitar intro, and the cool bass line ~!! I like the lyrics too!
Maybe you can add some rockin-out lead guitar at the end?
Quote from: Satchwood on May 07, 2010, 10:13:06 AMMaybe you can add some rockin-out lead guitar at the end?
If any of you virtuosos want to give it a whirl, I'd be honoured.
It should sound like the sound of hundreds of thousands of people's blood calling out from the ground.
Quote from: FuzzFace on May 07, 2010, 06:28:28 PMIt should sound like the sound of hundreds of thousands of people's blood calling out from the ground.
I think that's just the long way of saying "a Satchwood solo."