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Title: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: tom r on August 28, 2009, 02:00:52 PM
Howdy again
just got back from two weeks in Cornwall and saw some fantastic sunsets on wild and rugged coastlines. I got this tune in my head so i thought i'd try and record it while i could remember it. I hope it sounds atmospheric and Hope you like?

Tom
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: OsCKilO on August 28, 2009, 03:25:23 PM
Whats the tuning Tom?


It is "Quite" sublime.....


By quite I mean "Very, Very Very".........
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: launched on August 28, 2009, 04:04:46 PM
Hey Tom! I liked it. A great instrumental that you can sit back and think with.

Not only atmospheric, but "Far Out", too!!

Later,

Mark
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: Geir on August 28, 2009, 04:23:29 PM
Lovely music !!!
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: SE on August 28, 2009, 04:39:16 PM
Really enjoyed your tune, but I think some vox would be excellent. You should give it a go. The liryics are all most there rugged coastlines and sunsets, I,m sure it would be really good.
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: OsCKilO on August 28, 2009, 05:19:24 PM
I can See the waves Flicking up against the rocks when I listen to this....

A grey day by the coast..

A walk along the beach with a warm coat on...... Collar turned up....

Your dog running along whilst you walk..... Hands in Pockets......


Time to reflect.......

Feeling a new-found freedom........


(http://farm1.static.flickr.com/152/401643570_30312b9385.jpg?v=0)

Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: SE on August 28, 2009, 05:55:17 PM
Really spot on Oskilo just what I was thinking.



The waves crashing.

The wind blowing.

The sun blinding your eyes.

And your mate pissing in a can after having too much to drink, just magic.
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: Blooby on August 28, 2009, 07:34:59 PM
Quote from: side effect on August 28, 2009, 05:55:17 PMReally spot on Oskilo just what I was thinking.

The waves crashing.
The wind blowing.
The sun blinding your eyes.
And your mate pissing in a can after having too much to drink, just magic.

I wept openly upon reading.

Blooby
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: guitarron on August 28, 2009, 08:11:53 PM
haunting melody tom
nice tones
good composition

Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: Bluesberry on August 28, 2009, 09:04:22 PM
I can smell the ocean.  Very nice tune.
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: tom r on August 29, 2009, 11:57:55 AM
Hi
Some great comments. Pissing in a can? were you there???
The tuning is standard with the top E dropped to D. I tried some lyric with it but decided on an instrumental. Guess i might revisit them.
Yes Blooby some moving lyrical possibilities. Indeed it has been said that my singing and playing is enough to make a grown man (woman, child, dog, cat etc) cry. Not sure what they meant?
Tom :-)   
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: SteveG on August 29, 2009, 03:32:17 PM
Definitely crying out for some vox, don't forget the piss in the can whilst writing the lyrics :)
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: StevieM on August 29, 2009, 05:38:23 PM
So THAT'S what was in that can I cleaned off of the beach????
Only joking---- can't get near the beach this time of year, too many visitors!!! ;D
Nice instrumental there Tom, you've got our weather down just right with this,from really sunny and relaxing one minute,to windy as fu-- errr--anything, the next!!
Excellent playing too.
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: OsCKilO on August 30, 2009, 09:41:12 AM
If you can fit "pissing into a can" into the lyrics I will send you a 6 pack of your favorite beer in the post......


The thing is, I know that you will make it sound meaningful and profound!
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: StevieM on August 30, 2009, 12:30:56 PM
That sounds like a challenge if ever I heard one!!
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: OsCKilO on August 30, 2009, 12:41:14 PM
No Offence though Tom......


I remember when Jim did some lyrics for one of my tunes.......
I thought they were profound........
Then he told me what they were about......

Still Profound...... Just as Funny as F*ck!!!!!


Metaphores about the same thing will also win you the Beer......
So the Word's "Pissing in a beer can" do not have to be used....
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: tom r on August 30, 2009, 03:12:59 PM
A metaphore about pissing in a can??? Hmm now that is a challenge!
Osckilo i shall get my pen and paper out immediately indeed i may even put on some extra sound effects :-)

Tom
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: tom r on September 10, 2009, 03:04:22 PM
hi just thought id put a link to this

http://www.youtube.com/user/manaledo?gl=GB&hl=en-GB

Tom
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: OsCKilO on September 10, 2009, 04:36:59 PM

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tRY2OTMqQ2w

Awesome job!!!!!


I Guess that does qualify as meeting the challange..... :D


PM me with an address an the beer will be on its way!
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: tom r on September 11, 2009, 04:50:10 AM
Thanks don't worry about the beer. I havn't quite met the challenge. I have some lyrics, some of which are on the video and i think i have a bit of a middle eight so when i get the time i will probably re record the whole thing with vox.

I'm not overly precious about my music so i don't mind comments and ahving a bit of fun with the songs.

Tom
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: galestermusic on September 11, 2009, 06:26:17 AM
I love the Neil Young kinda of effect you bring in with the guitar in the middle, this is a great composition!
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: tom r on September 11, 2009, 07:32:05 AM
why thank you very much. i am a big Neil young fan so i can live with that comparison :-)

tom
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: Bosko Schwartz on September 11, 2009, 09:45:19 AM
Moving and beautiful. :)
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: Wiley on September 11, 2009, 12:36:43 PM
I can almost envision the coast lines.  Very calming. I liked it a lot.
P.J.
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: Satchwood on September 11, 2009, 01:12:25 PM
Very atmospheric - rather hauntingly catchy - nice acoustic playing & cool fx!!
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: tom r on September 12, 2009, 01:39:27 PM
Thanks again. I'm the atmosphere comes through in the tune.

Tom
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: OsCKilO on September 12, 2009, 01:42:48 PM
I was humming this today.......
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: launched on September 12, 2009, 02:12:25 PM
Hey Tom! What's goin' on?

Excellent video - The song's been in my play rotation, so I hear it quite a bit as well.

Later,

Mark
Title: Re: "If You're Not With Me" an instrumental
Post by: zabel8484 on September 12, 2009, 08:07:59 PM
great melody and acoustic guitars...