Hi chaps,
Bought my Micro BR about a month ago, a couple of covers down the line, here is my first attempt at my own song.......I hunted around this evening for a forum to stick it on as i would badly like some constructive criticism - stumbled across this fantastic site! Anyway, enough babbling, hello and let me know what you think of the tune.....its called Cast a Line - kind of a folksy 12 string acoustic based dit about being in the comfort zone and thinking there must be someone to blame type thing - wow that made u want to listen hey ;)
Cheers,
Dan
Welcome aboard. Great song, what is there to say, really nice voice. My wife is listening and she also likes your voice. You recorded your voice really well. The acoustic sounds good. I can't think of anything to add here other than I really like this song and your recording of this song. Lets have another. Great job.
Wow! That's a very mature, well-written song, and well performed song. I like the sparse use of piano (or is it chimes?).
I listened to it on my little laptop speakers, and had to pop on the headphones for a second listen.
Sounded even better in headphones, but it also revealed that everything is panned to center. The only tweak I'd suggest would be to pan things around a bit.
One thing that I occasionally do is to listen to my recordings in mono. If my mix and composition doesn't sound good in mono, panning isn't going to help much. Your song sounds great in mono, so panning will really fill the space.
Dan, welcome to the site, man. Great song and powerful. The harmonizing vocals is the icing on the cake. What kind of acoustic are you playing on?
BossMicroBRew
welcome mate ,what a cracking song , you have a great voice my friend , i love this to bits , definately play this over and over this week , wicked harmonies , give us more
Facemask93
The boys said it all here - Just a fantastic number!! If you have an MBR, then this is the right place for you - Absolutely the best place on the planet for tech info, advice, inspiration and all in all wonderful people to share your music with.
I agree with Ted - a little panning and puff work, this song would just jump right out at you and smack you in the face!!
Another listen is in order...
Welcome and see you around,
Mark
Your harmonies just popped out at me. And yes along with the others if you own a br of anykind this is the place. They are friendly and very hellpful.!!! Oh I love the little bells or chimes it adds to the charm of your song.!!
P.J.
Great vox and harmonies and a lovely song. As the others said, a bit more work on the stereo image would give you more depth. Either try a stereo effect on the guitar or double it up. The chimes are a great idea, but I have to say the third note in some of the sequences sounds a little dissonant to me, but that could be just me.
Great song though and look forward to hearing more.
Cheers,
Nigel
Nice song, you have a great voice for this style, it works really well.
I have to agree with the panning comments, a bit of separation will but some 'air' into the sound stage. But that aside it's well recorded and well delivered. Thanks for sharing.
Welcome to the board.
Hi Dan,
What a beautiful song.
Beauty by simplicity
I think a great Talent has Just entered the room......
Just stunning!
Peace Bro
Cant wait to hear more!
T(Osckilo)
This grabbed me right from the off. The little chimed accents are brilliant. You sing and play this beautifully, but what's special is the songwriting skill - you have bags of that on this evidence. I agree with the others about the panning; if you take the guitars a bit more left and right, you'll find a new soundscape. I sometimes take the backing vox panned far left and right too. All personal taste though!
What an excellent introduction. Wonderful work. And very original too. The only slight comparison is David Gray, but this is more subtle.
Hey great song well sung and well played and welcome aboard.
Quote from: Flash Harry on July 28, 2009, 06:38:15 AMNice song, you have a great voice for this style, it works really well.
I have to agree with the panning comments, a bit of separation will but some 'air' into the sound stage. But that aside it's well recorded and well delivered. Thanks for sharing.
Welcome to the board.
agreed -very solid tune man-kudos-great vox
Chaps, thanks very much for all your comments - bit overwhelming really.....ive taken on board the panning and production tips, will look to improve on my next effort - which isnt too far away (thanks to a week off work).
To BossMicroBRew, this effort was played on a 12 string Yamaha acoustic, an FG-413S-12 to be precise!
Once again, cheers for the comments.
Cheers,
Dan
Well wriiten! Thank you for this. Just need to tell you I'm sitting out by the pool, catching the rays, enjoying your song in my headphones. A great end to a day! Welcome aboard!
welcome to the best br site around, very well done. I hope to hear more soon.
Doug
Welcome aboard... I thought this was a great song. Very easy to listen too. I agree with some other comments... it sounded a little thin. But then again I tend to overdo it sometimes with the stereo width. It is food for thought though. Anyhow... this is just great.
great stuff
Great song, well played and sung. Cant fault it .... apart from the panning of course :D
Wow! That's just an amazing song! Welcome aboard!
Keep posting your stuff man!
Greets!
Another listen to a fantastic songwriter , this is just the best song ever ,
Rob
DNM - I've just listened to this through cheap headphones, on a crap computer (Not my own or normal one), and with an ear-infection, and it's STILL as catchy as hell!! :)
I agree that the centre sounds a bit cluttered, but I would have put that down to MY equipment not your production, but if the other Posters are pointing out something, then it's as well to take note because they are doing out of fairness to you and your song, not spite. Personally, I would add a reverbed snare-drum 3/4 of the way through to bolster the choruses...though even without, it's a superb song. Well done.
I'm trying to catch up (who am I kidding ... it's impossible) and I remembered this new great songwriter that I had heard a couple of songs from, so I dug and found another one !!!
This is a REALLY great song, performed beautifully with a great voice !
The Chimes are inspired this is really excellent Well Done!