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Title: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: BerryPatch on March 30, 2025, 05:35:49 PM
Here is an original that I had the basic verse idea for years now. Completely forgot about it until recently but took time to lay it down and finish it up. I finally have a pedalboard put together so the on electric tracks I used lots of effects from those pedals. Right now I'm fighting off a cold but I was well enough to put the vocals down today. ;D  Enjoy...

Godin acoustic
Hagstrom Impala guitar
Epiphone Viola bass
GarageBand drums and organ
Mellotron app
Shure SM 57 & 58
Pedals: Strymon Deco, Boss Blues Driver and Tremolo, MXR Phase 90, Fender Hammertone Fuzz, JHS Octave Reverb
Recorded in GarageBand, mastered on BandLab

I'm passing through the walls,
To see what I can recall,
I keep my distance with everything broken

No more reason to blame
Cause no one wants to be named
They just keep laughing while everything's broken

And I don't know why it can be so hard,
But it's obvious I can see clearer again
So just step outside cause you've made it this far
When they're running out of ammo there's no time to pretend

I long to hear the sound,
Of you when you're not around,
Till I can't stand it now

And I don't know the time
Preoccupied with my mind
It's all the same with everything broken

And I don't know why it can be so hard,
But it's obvious I can see clearer again
If you don't ask why you won't face up to the bar
There's no one else to please you when you're nearing the end

I'm breaking down the doors,
To know I've settled the score,
No need reason with it

I long to hear the sound,
Of you when you're not around,
Till I can't stand it now

And I don't know why it can be so hard,
But it's obvious I can see clearer again
So just step outside cause you've made it this far
When they're running out of ammo there's no time to pretend

Everything broken
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: OdilonGreen on March 30, 2025, 06:11:45 PM
The drive and melodicism of the verses is incredible; instant ear candy. And then the move from the tension of the verses to the more flowing, relaxed choruses is a very nice contrast. A great tune to listen to with one's eyes closed and just lose oneself in the moment.
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: thetworegs on March 31, 2025, 02:09:38 AM
Excellent lyric...... the music flows along......loving those guitars..nice strings excellent track
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: Ray Brookes on March 31, 2025, 12:58:50 PM
Great work, Mr. Berry. Production is first class and excellent writing. Great use of dynamics and cool lyrics.
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: cuthbert on April 01, 2025, 02:37:12 PM
The beginning reminded me a bit of Olivia Tremor Control (never a bad thing), and it settles into a mellow power pop piece with catchy hooks, along with some fantastic guitar leads.

I'll be listening to this one again (and again).

Top-drawer stuff, Keith!
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: StephenM on April 01, 2025, 03:58:59 PM
top drawer is right.... amazing... bravo to you... brilliant!
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: hardlock on April 01, 2025, 08:43:54 PM
Outstanding composition and performance. Great changes throughout and the vibe really catches and holds you. A fine piece of work overall! 8)
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: Oldrottenhead on April 02, 2025, 12:25:15 PM
That's a fucking hit record. Wow!
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Post by: Pru on April 02, 2025, 09:19:34 PM
fabulous writing mate. the production is on another level and the use of the different instruments is so tastefully done. fighting  off a cold and still sing so well! crikey! love how those chords play the song out.
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: TPB on April 03, 2025, 07:02:48 AM
Well I am glad you resurrected this song everything is spot on well done young blood
Tim
Title: Re: Everything Broken by BerryPatch
Post by: Farrell Jackson on April 03, 2025, 11:31:13 AM
This is a real winner Keith! Eat your heart out Mr. Rundgren. I agree this is hit material. An excellent mix, production and performances. On my second listen...The dynamics, stereo spread and depth of field are extraordinary, nicely done!