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Title: It's the First Day
Post by: Mike_S on December 29, 2024, 08:21:15 AM
Just messing on 2 chords and developed into a song... was struggling with the mix for a while so hopefully haven't overdone things...

1 vocal
2 rhythm guitars left and right (same thing played twice)
1 solo
Bass - Harley Benton (love playing bass)
Drums - GarageBand (tried a softer kit)


You can't change anything, even if you try
It won't change anything, but I can't tell you why
You gotta leave the past, you gotta let it go
Like when the credits roll, at the movie show

You gotta move on, when there's nothing left
You gotta stop pretending, that it's not a mess
You gotta take it, when you get a chance
You gotta spread your wings, c'mon let me see you dance

Take the first step, let the day begin
Let the past go, let the future in
It's the first day, of another life 

You've not been living life, you've just been killing time
You didn't notice it but, but you lost your mind
There's something different, in the air today
And I can feel it, I think it's here to stay

Take the first step, let the day begin
Let the past go, let the future in
It's the first day, of another life 

__Solo__

Don't want no trouble, I've seen it all before 
Don't want no enemies, can't take it anymore
You gotta look at things, in a different way
Those old ideas well, maybe they've had their day

Take the first step, let the day begin
Let the past go, let the future in
It's the first day, of another life 
It's the first day, of another life 
It's the first day, of another life 
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: Ray Brookes on December 29, 2024, 11:37:11 AM
Cool song, Mike and I like how you have approached the drumming with this one and that softer kit. Good lyrics and that chorus is as catchy as hell. Also, I like the jangly guitar chords and I don't think you have overdone anything in the mix.
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: StephenM on December 29, 2024, 01:02:01 PM
Mike... 

Whoa man.. this sounds so powerful.

Man, get out the way..
You got this.

Strong...but with ridiculosly great guitar work...
Although thats no surprise
Almost sound like a banjo too.

Will bb.   Back
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: hardlock on December 29, 2024, 04:59:34 PM
Everything sounds great and it's a fine song! Dig the lead as well as the chorus. Very cool number! 8)
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: T.C. Elliott on December 30, 2024, 05:24:19 AM
I'll reiterate that the mix sounds good. The combination of the drums and the phrasing in the vocal melody combine to give an insistent feeling that gives the lyric an urgency you don't always get from a meditative or optimistic message like this one. It's cool to get a positive message early this morning and much needed for a Monday.
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: Ron D Bowes on December 31, 2024, 08:17:50 AM
Nice bright guitars. Then the slightly Dylanesque delivery of the vocals and indeed the chord progression. Nice job.
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: Farrell Jackson on December 31, 2024, 09:22:31 AM
Maybe it's because I recently watched the Dylan film (A Complete Unknown) but I agree with Ron that your vocal messaging, delivery and phrasing brings Bob Dylan's style to mind but better. I compliment you for that! The lead solo is excellently put together and played. Overall a cool mix and song!
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: Zoltan on January 02, 2025, 06:27:36 AM
It's might be the First Day, but it sure ain't the first time i'm hearing this song.

I didn't really know what to say when i first heard this. I'm loving it, but i wanted to keep on keeping on just as a listener. It's a song that hits the nail in the head and plays for its audience. It's slightly alternative in style yet it's modern in a retro way.

Yeah, i'm digging this!
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: Pru on January 02, 2025, 10:37:38 AM
good song and great lyrics. maybe has a bit of a Dylan vibe but essentially your own style
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: Bluesberry on January 02, 2025, 05:18:45 PM
Yeah, I dig the hell out of this...drives along hard ...Beaty and meaty...grooves like old Jack Kerouac on the road of life
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: chapperz66 on January 04, 2025, 07:32:23 AM
The mix sounds spot on to me as well, Mike.  Fine song beautifully performed and produced.

Paul
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: SE on January 04, 2025, 06:56:38 PM
Yes just cool, the vocal is the
mainstay, then the track is just excellent.
Wow loved it!!
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on January 05, 2025, 04:26:31 AM
Love it Mike. The repeated chords has a great kind of addictive effect on the ear. Love the jangly guitars, the drums and your vocals. Brilliant lyrics and just right for the start of the year.
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: Ted on January 07, 2025, 09:06:20 AM
Dylan Schmylan. I had to look to see if this was a Lou Reed or Velvet Underground cover.

An impressive two-chorder. I love the guitar tone on the solo in particular!
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: bruno on January 07, 2025, 09:38:07 AM
Listened to this a couple of days back and forgot to comment. This is a really cool vibe. Like this a lot
B
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: BerryPatch on January 07, 2025, 06:48:16 PM
Awesome track Mike, great vocal and the lyrics are excellent. The 2 chord groove is sweet and the solo it wicked, I dig the little bit of delay you slapped on there. So great to hear a song from you!
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: launched on January 21, 2025, 08:48:54 PM
I really like this one Mike, great vocals with a fab music arrangement. And the mix was just right, well done!
Title: Re: It's the First Day
Post by: StephenM on March 14, 2025, 06:03:35 AM
yes... the mix is great... and it really is to my ears.
the drums hit just right and the bass.

but the song is amazing and vocally perfect...

I love your voice... the lead almost seems non existent...and I think here that is as it should be... because nothing should over shadow that voice...

yeah man... wow.  great choice for the sampler...