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Title: White Girl In White
Post by: Ray Brookes on May 03, 2024, 03:18:23 PM
White girl in white
Beautiful in her wedding dress
White girl in white
Hair makeup; looking her best
He never did show that day
She didn't know he'd run away
White girl in white
Left waiting in the chapel.

They tried to comfort her
Till the taxi came to get her
Arms around her; words of wisdom
To make her feel better
Girl in tears in sorrow in grief
All the guests shake their heads in disbelief
White girl in white
Left waiting in the chapel.

Meanwhile in a smokey grungy bar
Somewhere north of the border
He sits with his comforting beer
Staring at the ring he bought her.
Without a sign or a word from his mouth
Jumps in his car and heads down south
To the white girl in white
He left waiting at the chapel.
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: hardlock on May 03, 2024, 09:46:39 PM
Great song Ray. Felt like I was in the story while you presented it. Very enjoyable listen! 8)
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: Ron D Bowes on May 05, 2024, 04:59:08 AM
Beautiful guitar playing Ray. Excellent production. Excellent song.
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: Farrell Jackson on May 05, 2024, 07:09:27 AM
You did it again Ray! I don't how you keep coming up with these great songs but you do. The guitar work, lyrics and vocals are all excellent!
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: Johnbee on May 05, 2024, 06:21:29 PM
Sounds like the young man had cold feet and needed to get some confidence at the bar.  Interesting story song.  Great guitar work.

 :) John B
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: des0free on May 08, 2024, 10:49:49 PM
Back for a second listen and to comment... Super nice backing track on this. Lyrics sound like a movie storyline. My favorite line: "He sits with his comforting beer", uh no, I mean "Jumps in his car and heads down south to the white girl in white". Hollywood ending!
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: Zoltan on May 09, 2024, 11:29:18 AM
The song begins with acoustic guitar playing that would make Gordon Giltrap reach for his notes. The way the mood is built with layered instrumentation and carefully crafted melodies makes for a great listen.

I always approach Rays songs with a certain uncertainty because i've already run out of superlatives and i don't feel it would be appropriate to talk about Crocodile Dundee in this context.

5/5.
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: Mike_S on May 10, 2024, 09:33:07 AM
Lovely stuff Ray. It's such a pleasant song... beautiful, light and a great way for me to start my weekend!

Have a good one and thanks for all the great songs you put up.

Mike
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: Bluesberry on May 10, 2024, 02:40:28 PM
Absolutely stellar guitar playing, such a great song
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on May 12, 2024, 02:51:40 PM
Brilliant Ray, another masterful song. The lyrics are so good in your songs. The music is relaxing, the acoustic guitars sound beautiful and all the music is perfectly played and produced.
You have such a great distinctive voice. Lovely piano too.
Title: Re: White Girl In White
Post by: kenny mac on May 12, 2024, 06:18:14 PM
What an excellent performance.
That guitar work sounds amazing.
Brilliant story too.
Top notch stuff.
Fabulous.