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Title: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Blooby on April 25, 2024, 08:14:34 AM

From Last night. With Maker's Mark 46 for anybody keeping score.

Blooby

Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Lurker on April 25, 2024, 08:45:34 AM
I didn't get any Maker's Mark!

Gray day again gray day
More clouds roll our way
Drear is here to stay
Gray day another gray day

A chill
pervasive persuasive
dampens desire
to venture forth

Ideas
fizzle with drizzle
inspiration expires
at the source

Daylight diffuse
Contrast reduced
Shadows confused
Warming refused
Any sense of well being
Feeling abused

Gray day gray day
What more is there to say
Except clouds go away
Gray day no more gray day
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Ray Brookes on April 25, 2024, 01:37:08 PM
Stellar production here. So much space in the mix and every guitar line so tastefully executed. The passionate vocal work is the icing on the cake. Great work, guys.
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Mike_S on April 25, 2024, 03:53:52 PM
Very intense guys. Listening here on headphones and zoning out to this. Great track, moody as hell and fine production too.

Mike
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Zoltan on April 26, 2024, 05:22:01 AM
Captivating. Spellbounding. I had to hear this more than once. Heavy on mood. Low on sugar.
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: StephenM on April 26, 2024, 11:52:31 AM
I like the Makers on the occasion. 
however, I like this much more.
the song has an intense bottom end.
gives ample room for the upper end of the guitar.
no fighting for frequency supremacy.
a superior mix.  Should be coveted.
very, very righteous mix.  bravo

vocals stellar
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Lurker on April 26, 2024, 02:49:25 PM
This melody is almost identical to the last tune, "Flow of Time". Someone is copying us and it's us. I guess we're too self-absorbed to notice.
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: BerryPatch on April 26, 2024, 06:54:44 PM
Cool flowing rhythm here, sort of jazzy in a 70s space rock way. Yes, the mixing is spot on here, leaving the vocals to shine through. Great vocal from Lurker as well! Excellent track!
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on April 28, 2024, 03:40:09 AM
These collaborations from you guys are amazing. Great music from you all. Perfect vocals from Lurker. All mixed to perfection, I love the style of it too. One of those songs you don't want to end.
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: StephenM on April 29, 2024, 06:44:03 AM
listening in headphones it sounds like the drums and bass are behind me... very cool
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Ron D Bowes on April 30, 2024, 07:16:02 AM
Nice spacey feel to the track - I like the little plucked echo notes on the axe. Well, delivered vox. Hangs together Nicely.Cool job guys.
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: chapperz66 on April 30, 2024, 09:28:57 AM
Atmospheric as hell.  A great journey..

I had to google Makers Mark.  Naïve old fool that I am.  Although I had my suspicions - and not far from the mark!
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: Johnbee on April 30, 2024, 07:56:51 PM
Enjoyed the listen.  Nice guitar work, vocal & lyrics.

 :) John B
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: StephenM on May 01, 2024, 08:16:09 AM
Quote from: Lurker on April 26, 2024, 02:49:25 PMThis melody is almost identical to the last tune, "Flow of Time". Someone is copying us and it's us. I guess we're too self-absorbed to notice.

it happens to alot of really good bands making tons of money... no worries here... at the end of the day I think unless you are putting 10 songs on a album or something just take each song separate... likely anyone who listens is not going to know... but I do think you do have to be true to yourself and what you want to do... for me that is always the kicker... does the artist believe in what they are doing?  Does it come from the soul?  I never get anything less from you two
Title: Re: "Gray Day" w/Lurker
Post by: karl1171 on May 07, 2024, 02:36:50 AM
Like this, great production, guitar and vocals. Its nicely restrained, you've resisted the tempation to add more and spoil the atmosphere.

Funnily enough I'm currently working on a song called Grey Day! Reckon it'll be a couple of months off completion though...