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Title: Self Sacrifice
Post by: thetworegs on December 02, 2023, 08:20:54 AM
I went for a cold dip in the local reservoir with the wife to try and find lifes elixir , I think I found  a little, it did feel good afterwards, not so good getting in the air temp was -1c but  hey you just have to over come these things, if you want to find or feel the good things.....
I recorded the Gibson acoustic (As the battery has died on the pickup and I can't be arsed to change it yet) with my Neuman TLM 103 mic also the vocal and using the m-audio keystation 88 with Logics acoustic piano Hall for the keys ...I still can't get the perfect sound on the vocal as I would like it but I'm sure its me and not the mic anyway thanks for listening
The cold water will cleanse  the mind
But to the body it feels unkind
Dipping your toe in through the ice
You enter a world of self sacrifice

To lead that life that is right
You can waste a life time to the fight
failures break down the will
Then theres that duty in you to for-fill

Dip your toe
And enter that world of sacrifice

Break

You know what it is you need to do
You need to fight the fight an win the coup
Gain control back  of your mind
And start to truly feel alive

Dip your toe into the ice
And enter that world of self sacrifice

Break

Dip your toe into the ice
And enter that world of self sacrifice

This is the road of transition
the mighty cost of admission
To that life that you want
Dip your toe into the ice
And enter the world of self sacrifice
Title: Re: Self Sacrifice
Post by: Geir on December 02, 2023, 04:39:33 PM
I do like the occasional dip in a hole in the ice, and I like what it has inspired here.

The vocals sounds great. On cans the guitar is a bit boomy, I think I'd try a high pass filter to get rid of the lowest frequencies, but hey this is just nitpicking
Title: Re: Self Sacrifice
Post by: thetworegs on December 02, 2023, 06:29:18 PM
Thanks for the advice Geir I used your advice and remixed using the AuBandpass in logic I believe i've got rid of that boom now and improved the clearness of the vocal and guitar also adding a little more reverb as well
Title: Re: Self Sacrifice
Post by: kenny mac on December 03, 2023, 12:10:07 AM
Excellent acoustic sound.
Also I think the vocal is crystal clear as well,getting a johnny cash vibe from this.
I don't believe I'll ever go cold water swimming,or dipping  unless in fuerteventura, the pools there are bloody freezing.
Excellent job mate.
Title: Re: Self Sacrifice
Post by: Pete C on December 03, 2023, 04:26:29 AM
An interesting subject for a song...you wouldn't get me swimming in icy water though. The guitar sounds great and I really liked the acoustic solo.

Pete
Title: Re: Self Sacrifice
Post by: The Gobi Desert Canoe Club on December 03, 2023, 11:37:12 AM
I've heard that cold water is invigorating and good for everyday well being, but I don't think a herd of wild horses would drag me to a river especially in the winter.
Really enjoyed the listen.  Willie
Title: Re: Self Sacrifice
Post by: hardlock on December 03, 2023, 03:54:49 PM
A fine moody tune. Tones sound good to me. 8)