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Title: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: Ray Brookes on May 11, 2023, 03:04:24 PM
She was a dancing jewel
Sat there on my lap
Me a drunken fool
Falling for the tender trap
Cold, cold my wife's eyes
I'd seen that look before
Cold, cold eyes
Between me and the open door

Looking through the prism
Of a very angry day
I knew she wouldn't listen
To what I had to say
Cold, cold eyes
I'd seen that look before
Cold, cold eyes
Between me and the open door

It's quiet here now
She's gone back to her mothers
I hear a car outside
She's sent round all her brothers
I hear the angry yells
I've heard those yells before
Angry, angry yells
They're smashing in the door.

Oh heck.
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: Farrell Jackson on May 12, 2023, 07:42:13 AM
Smooth jazz is a good bed for this melody and words. The music is very easy on the ears and the guitar solos are as smooth as glass. Listening and following the words, it seems like you've stepped in it again, Ray. Watch out for those brothers,  :(
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: StephenM on May 12, 2023, 06:03:45 PM
man this has 70's pop greatness all over it Ray... like Hall and Oats or Ace or even Jeff Starship with Marty Balin...
lovely guitar leads in there.. really nice rhythm guitar work as well... it is a wide open mix with lots of space but it still is very interesting... and works it's magic for the great vocals... I don't even notice the darker lyrics ... yeah... those lap dances can be costly.
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: hooper on May 13, 2023, 04:33:51 AM
Smooth jazz indeed, enjoyable and entertaining. Very nice job creating the soft, hypnotic rhythm backing and the reverb-delay on the brush snare is perfect. The guitar arpeggios and solos clean and tasteful. Sounds like the guy in this story is in serious trouble but still has a good attitude nevertheless... 
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: thetworegs on May 13, 2023, 09:01:51 AM
Loving that electric piano....excellent vibe .....great lyric as always ....perfect tone on that solo...loved it
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on May 14, 2023, 03:58:46 AM
I hope that weren't a true story ray..those brothers sound dangerous lol.
Brilliant song ray and a great story. Lovely smooth style music, love the vocals. Another classic
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: chapperz66 on May 14, 2023, 01:52:28 PM
Oh my word!  I've said this before that the imagery you create is superb.  And then there's the music.

Marvellous my friend.  Quite marvellous.


Paul
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: Trist on May 15, 2023, 03:50:15 AM
Such a chilled and mellow song this one Ray quite a contrast to the lyrical theme, really tastefully made, soft and ominous/mournful at the same time. i like the oh heck at the end . enjoyed
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: TPB on May 16, 2023, 01:21:10 PM
Smooth Jazzy Goodness so so good
Tim
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: Pete C on May 16, 2023, 02:28:55 PM
Nice laid back evening listen. Very cool !

Pete
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: Zoltan on May 18, 2023, 03:22:52 AM
This one ticks all the boxes. 70's - 80's vibes. Great sounds. Such a great arrangement. Nothing is rushed. Everything moves at an even pace yet always captivating the listener. Such great lyrics too... Telling a full story with select few lines. 5/5.
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: Mike_S on May 19, 2023, 05:13:26 PM
Jeez yeah, it's got to be so hard to ignore the dancing jewel... my imagination took over a bit there :)

Great tune, lovely laid back chill out.

Mike
Title: Re: Cold Cold Eyes
Post by: Bluesberry on May 20, 2023, 04:34:01 PM
A man of so many styles.........this is smooth man, real smooth.......sounds great.......waiting for the solo........ahhhhhhhh, does not disappoint.....lovely