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Title: 'Through the Eyes of a Stranger' - Greeny Monday Original
Post by: Greeny (No longer active) on April 12, 2021, 06:09:25 AM
Retro 80's new wave. Part of a whole album of 80's synth and new wave I've been working on. Garageband drums and synths plus HB 12-string electric guitar and vocals. I've found the 12-string really works with the new wave sound I'm after, and adds some humanity to the cold synths.

The chorus lyric is partly a Carl Gustav Jung quote (with a lot of artistic licence and additions).

lost inside a film-noir dream
shop dummies and stopped watches
tour guides in a burning zoo
carrying their crosses

let's share lucidity
in a taxi in Berlin

we need to kindle a light
in the darkness of mere being
through the eyes of a stranger
it's ourselves we're seeing
in the underpass
look inward and awaken
through the eyes of a stranger
unknown subway stations

the streets are wearing uniforms
the boredom military
cold winds from the eastern bloc
and re-runs on the telly

let's share lucidity
in a taxi in Berlin

we need to kindle a light
in the darkness of mere being
through the eyes of a stranger
it's ourselves we're seeing
in the underpass
look inward and awaken
through the eyes of a stranger
unknown subway stations

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Post by: ODH on April 12, 2021, 09:21:25 AM
Great stuff, Tim. Somewhere between Human League and Separations era Pulp. Sheffield area anyway.

Glad I put my headphones on for this.

  :)
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Post by: Farrell Jackson on April 12, 2021, 09:50:17 AM
A very cool New Wave vibe Tim, you nailed that 80's synths sound. It's gonna be a cool album!

Farrell
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Post by: tonyc on April 12, 2021, 12:04:23 PM
wow tim you write some catchy songs and lyrics love this well worth another play .....cheers tony cee
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Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on April 12, 2021, 12:10:22 PM
Some great 80's style synths in here, love that drumbeat too. All the music is cool, sounds authentic  for the era. It definitely has a human league, Gary numan or even Bowieish sound. You always seem to write great lyrics too. The album should be great :) darren
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Post by: Ray Brookes on April 12, 2021, 02:34:22 PM
Great lyrics as always, Tim and the content suits the austere sound of those synths perfectly. I like how that guitar does add an element of human feel to the track and production here is first class. As Darren says I also get a Gary Newman kinda vibe yet having said that there is a uniqueness and originality with the writing and production. Great work.
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Post by: Bluesberry on April 12, 2021, 08:25:24 PM
This is so great....full sound...great chorus....overall a very strong song, great mixing all those sounds together....masterful job
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Post by: Ferryman_1957 on April 13, 2021, 03:52:43 AM
Oooh, loving those fruity synths! Great sounds, especially the bassy ones, it's sounding really good up synth street.... You absolutely nailed the 80s vibe, Foxx, Numan, HL and others coming through loud and clear. But your vocals make it uniquely Greeny, your lyrics and vocals have more nuance and feeling than many of the 80s types (who, let's face it, weren't the greatest vocalists.... ;D).

Love the underlying rhythm and core sounds, there's also great dynamics in the arrangement. Nice job on the production as well, the synths sound rich and full without any muddiness or harshness, often a challenge with synths. It's catchy as hell as well, really loving this one. Where's my trench coat and eye shadow.......? 
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Post by: Greeny (No longer active) on April 13, 2021, 05:59:08 AM
Quote from: Ferryman on April 13, 2021, 03:52:43 AMYou absolutely nailed the 80s vibe, Foxx, Numan, HL and others coming through

Very on the button Nigel!

I'm aiming for a mixture of Foxx's 'Underpass', Ultravox's (Foxx again) 'Lonely Hunter', HL's 'Being Boiled', and everything Numan did with Tubeway Army :-)
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Post by: kenny mac on April 13, 2021, 12:13:58 PM
Wow excellent stuff greeny.
It brings back memories of penthouse and pavement.
Some great sounds there.
Fantastic.
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Post by: Flash Harry on April 13, 2021, 03:52:51 PM
Boom.

Nailed it.

Love those aggressive smacking percussive bottoms and icy icy leads. Bril.
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Post by: WarpCanada on April 13, 2021, 06:50:34 PM
This is next level good mate.

Vocals are fantastic.  Lyrics are well written and the 80s vibe is strong.
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Post by: StephenM on April 13, 2021, 08:07:19 PM
this is simply sensational synthesis.... like photosynthesis...full of light... big and bold...assertive without being aggressive.... the chorus is really addictive....
and your voice fits so well...kind of like Greeny singing with the Eurythmics....(that would be cool)
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Post by: thetworegs on April 14, 2021, 12:50:17 AM
You've definitely caught that 80's vibe great lyrics too
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Post by: BerryPatch on April 14, 2021, 10:03:42 AM
Great synth pop with chorus that really hits. Love all the intertwined parts here and the mixing is perfect.
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Post by: Mike_S on April 15, 2021, 03:55:18 PM
Yes you've nailed that eighties new wave feeling here, but you've added another layer of something. Your own unique touch to this style sets it alight. Really catchy, but with loads of substance too. Cool lyrics too.

Mike
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Post by: SE on April 15, 2021, 04:47:57 PM
80,s electro pop, so cool but still  sounds current, well done enjoyed it lots!
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Post by: Frank53 on April 15, 2021, 06:48:31 PM
Great 80's take, indeed. Everyone has referenced the people it reminds them of. Well thought out, with some great sounds, and intriguing lyrics.