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Title: Something Rare
Post by: Nelly 20 on April 02, 2021, 08:16:24 AM
Hi all,

I want to share this collab. with you all , This is a Mother's Day song,  I'd love to hear your thoughts on this demo before We make a full version of it. I wrote the lyric and Tommy
came up with the music .

https://soundcloud.app.goo.gl/cj3hWke1VWAZyX6r8

Lyrics by Nelly Tharwat
Music by Tommy L. Day ©?2021

Title: Something Rare

Verse 1:

You carried me softly in your arms
Took my hand to keep me from all harm
Mama was the first word I said
And I was the first thought in your head.
You repaired the things I pulled apart
And gave me your loving heart

Pre-Chorus:

I feel your hand in mine every day
Helping me, guiding me on my way.

Chorus:

Your soulful touch, your gentle care
There's nothing else that can compare
Love like this is worth so much
Love like this is something rare

Verse 2:

I love the touch of your warm skin
Your voice is sweet as a violin
I draw my strength from your will
You're the reason for my skill
When I was sick, you stayed by my bed
And wished it was you instead

Pre-Chorus:

I feel your hand in mine every day
Helping me, guiding me on my way.

Chorus:

Your soulful touch, your gentle care
There's nothing else that can compare
Love like this is worth so much
Love like this is something rare

Bridge:

Now's the time to thank you but,
I can't find the proper words yet
You're as the sun, you light up my life
You're a sun that doesn't set!

Chorus:

Your soulful touch, your gentle care
There's nothing else that can compare
Love like this is worth so much
Love like this is something rare
Love like this is something rare
Love like this is something rare


If I and submit this song to a record label, Will I find a big star accept to sing a song / old style music like this nowadays? 
 Please, I need some comments to help me , Should we try another melody or change the way Tommy is singing with?

Thanks.
Title: Re: Something Rare
Post by: StephenM on April 02, 2021, 07:28:33 PM
I listened to this today...and it is very nice... I like long songs so it's no problem for me but some don't ....my suggestion would be to offer a longer version and a shorter one...
It's obvious that you love the Beatles...very much in their style, which, you can't go wrong there...
i think the song is nice as is...
but yes a more embellished version would be great too...
welcome to Songcrafters... hope to hear more in the near future...
Title: Re: Something Rare
Post by: Nelly 20 on April 03, 2021, 01:08:21 AM

Hi Stephen,

Thank you very much for your input, and for your positive comment, glad you like it.
appreciate your comment. :)
Title: Re: Something Rare
Post by: Redler on April 03, 2021, 11:02:49 PM
Sweet song with Beatles vibe. Nice chord progression...enjoyable listening! The voice fits perfectly to this song...
Title: Re: Something Rare
Post by: Nelly 20 on April 04, 2021, 12:35:55 AM

Hi Redler,
Thank you for your comment, I'm glad you enjoyed it.  :)
Title: Re: Something Rare
Post by: Groundy on April 07, 2021, 01:49:00 PM
Nice number, well written and recorded, well done... Alex
Title: Re: Something Rare
Post by: Nelly 20 on April 11, 2021, 01:04:26 AM
Thank you , Alex,..appreciate your comment.