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Title: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: Hilary on March 28, 2021, 03:55:09 AM
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Hello,

I used a list of 3 letter words from thefreedictionary.com and wrote a song (with a bit of artistic licence) using only the words from the list.

Garageband - drums, bass and piano and 2 vocal tracks.

I'm not sure whether it needs an intro so I'll take advice on that . . .

Why ban the bra say sum one way ago
She try, she run, big jug
She saw, she rub raw
She try hot-tub
She wet now, aha
She try hot-tub
She wet now, aha

She say bye too ban the bra
She not too old now
She say bye too ban the bra
She not too old now
She say bye too ban the bra
She not too old now
She dip her toe
Hot tub hot

She say bye too ban the bra
She not too old now
She buy new red bra
She dip her toe, hot tub hot

She sit and sew
She sit and sew she hum too low
She sit and sew
She sit and sew she hum too low

She say bye too ban the bra
She not too old now
She say bye too ban the bra
She not too old now
She say bye too ban the bra
She dip her toe
Hot tub hot

Sky dim
she not too not too old now
hot tub hot

she had fun all day inn sun
and cat has new red ham arc
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: Ferryman_1957 on March 28, 2021, 01:24:03 PM
Loving this new electro-y direction, there's some crazy sounds here that combine together really well. I love the groove as well, it's really infectious. The lyrics have a kind of cod-Oriental feel to them and they create a suitably off the wall narrative for a cut up song. Very different and very enjoyable.

I think it works as it is, but something similar to the outro would also work as an intro if you wanted to add something at the start.
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: Mike_S on March 28, 2021, 04:10:01 PM
Very very good. Such great fun, had me smiling away here. Vocal delivery was absolutely brilliant. You know exactly where to put emphasis for effect. Whacky, cool noises, really well put together in GarageBand. Fab.

Mike
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: StephenM on March 28, 2021, 06:11:06 PM
isn't this just a bunch of fun?  oh this is lots of fun...clever and cool way to get your words....
music is cool too....
bingo....
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: Greeny (No longer active) on March 29, 2021, 01:58:23 AM
Really reminds me of Ian Dury and the Blockheads for some reason. Funky, fun and brilliant. We can hear you're really getting to grips with Garageband. Love the sound of that clav.

The lyrics hit just the right balance between nonsense and profound. It all really works.

'and cat has new red ham'. That was my favourite line. Could be completely profound :-)

Nice one!
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: Hilary on March 29, 2021, 07:02:46 AM
Quote from: Greeny on March 29, 2021, 01:58:23 AMReally reminds me of Ian Dury and the Blockheads for some reason. Funky, fun and brilliant. We can hear you're really getting to grips with Garageband. Love the sound of that clav.

The lyrics hit just the right balance between nonsense and profound. It all really works.

'and cat has new red ham'. That was my favourite line. Could be completely profound :-)

Nice one!

Oh dear- it's meant to be new red hammock ham arc (better to hear than read) as in she's not wearing the bra and the cat is using it to sleep in (err large cups) always works out better when I explain what's in my head !!!

I am a huge Ian Dury fan btw.
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on March 29, 2021, 12:40:56 PM
Yeah I'm getting a Ian dury or talking heads vibe here. I like the funk style backing.the lyrics are fun :)
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: pjd1 on March 29, 2021, 01:28:45 PM
Quirky composition , great idea to have used 3 letter words in the song , it works really well with the musical theme you have chosen and i really enjoyed listening to the tune , thinking outside the box is always a winner , and this is a winner !!

GUD JOB HIL !!!

Dunny
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: thetworegs on March 29, 2021, 02:35:36 PM
I get that Ian fury vibe too Hils great job as Nigel said infectious
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: launched on March 29, 2021, 09:28:45 PM
Extremely clever!

All I can say is "I really dig your awesomeness here!"

If I could only have said that in three letter words... :)
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: Kenneth on March 30, 2021, 12:50:30 AM
I like the direction your music is going lately Hilary. Your personality is in the tunes, the humor, cleverness... even for this fest it comes through!
Well done!
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: Bluesberry on March 30, 2021, 06:17:23 PM
Quote from: launched link=topic=30937.msg367721#msg367721 date=1617074925

All I can say is "I really dig your awesomeness here!"

/quote]
I agree ....awesomeness in the house.....look out
Title: Re: The Red Bra (Hilary)
Post by: BerryPatch on March 30, 2021, 09:10:09 PM
Ive been loving your GarageBand creations. The creativity is bursting. Love the funky backing the lyrics are a real hoot as always.