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Title: Remember Me
Post by: Ray Brookes on March 22, 2021, 07:40:47 PM
I decided to write a song about a mother singing to her adult daughter about the sacrifices etc. a good mother makes when raising a child. I needed a female voice obviously so I asked my wife to sing it which she did after a lot of persuasion.

Mother:

When you did n't wanna go to school
Because you did n't wanna do sport
When you did n't wanna look a fool
Play truant and get caught
When you needed help to do what they wanted you to do
Well you must remember me I'm the one you came running to

Daughter:

When I got myself in deep
And everything falling apart
When I cried myself to sleep
Cause some boy had broke my heart
When I screamed and stamped my feet like children often do
Yes I remember you; you're the one I came running to

Mother:

I never once told you about
The many times I went without
The many hits I had to take
The many nights I lay awake
   
A good team we always were
Always knew just where we stood
But now the roles have been reversed
And the shoe's on the other foot
Here I stand alone and I guess this is something new
I hope you remember me, you're the one I'm running to.
Title: Re: Remember Me
Post by: StephenM on March 23, 2021, 12:01:18 AM
uh...please tell this lady to please please please sing some more and post them on here...we need more ladies voices...and hers is excellent...not just good...
I hear hints of Kate Bush and Karen Carpenter...
another stunningly wonderful song Ray....

yes...please more of this sort of thing...it's wonderful!
Title: Re: Remember Me
Post by: Kenneth on March 23, 2021, 12:39:00 AM
Yes.. I agree with Steve 100%.
Gorgeous. We definitely need more ladies around here to sing, and that was beautifully done.
Great song Ray, you write a lovely song, for sure.
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Post by: IanR on March 23, 2021, 01:12:19 AM
Great song and wonderful performance.

A cracker!
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Post by: thetworegs on March 23, 2021, 02:13:46 AM
Beautifully sung with the perfect lyric another for the pie pod
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Post by: Greeny (No longer active) on March 23, 2021, 04:00:46 AM
This is stunning. The songwriting is amazing - emotional and sophisticated, but it's that beautiful warm vocal that elevates it into the stratosphere. I get the Karen Carpenter vibe too, and the song seems to inhabit that classic 70's MOR world. So many fantastic details. Pure class in every way.
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Post by: Kody on March 23, 2021, 09:18:43 AM
Before I even looked at the other comments I was thinking this sounds like the Carpenters. I'm in total agreement - word for word, with what everyone is saying. Very nicely done!
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Post by: Farrell Jackson on March 23, 2021, 11:07:44 AM
Excellent songwriting Ray and your wife has a pro sounding voice/phrasing!

Farrell
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Post by: TPB on March 23, 2021, 11:10:15 AM
well I hope you are showing the misses all the comment outstanding vocal would love to hear more, Lyrics are heartfelt and relatable
Bravo Tim
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Post by: Bluesberry on March 23, 2021, 01:34:05 PM
What a great vocal......music is not bad either  ;D .....but what a voice.....the voice is what sells this one.....it would seem you have a recording partner now on vocals.....very nice.....let's have another from the two of you
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Post by: tonyc on March 23, 2021, 01:43:12 PM
wow christ not just one talented person in your house hold but two . i wish my wife could sing like that . brilliant ahh kid , do more . and what a fantastic story as well top notch ray ,,,,,......cheers tony cee
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Post by: pjd1 on March 23, 2021, 01:44:29 PM
Gobsmackingly brilliant !!!!!! Your wife has a incredibly sweet and tender voice , amazing couple you both are !! The song Ray was brilliant loved it , and with having two daughters i feel every word you have written .,wonderful idea and recording , another cracker from you both !!

Dunny
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Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on March 23, 2021, 02:02:13 PM
This is a beautiful song ray and lovely singing from your wife..what a duo you are. You should get her to sing more with you. Great lyrics and music. :)
Title: Re: Remember Me
Post by: StephenM on March 23, 2021, 07:06:22 PM
Quote from: Bluesberry on March 23, 2021, 01:34:05 PMWhat a great vocal......music is not bad either  ;D .....but what a voice.....the voice is what sells this one.....it would seem you have a recording partner now on vocals.....very nice.....let's have another from the two of you

".let's have another from the two of you".... yes bartender...pour me a double!!!
Title: Re: Remember Me
Post by: BerryPatch on March 23, 2021, 08:23:08 PM
Your wife did an excellent job! Lovely backing and songwriting as well, love the little lead fills you added in the mix. It would be great to hear the both of you sing together :)
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Post by: hardlock on March 24, 2021, 12:35:39 AM
Everything about this song is outstanding Ray! Love it - and yes, I'll have another please! ;)
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Post by: bruno on March 24, 2021, 03:08:50 AM
Oh wow. Nothing more to say.
Wonderful.
B
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Post by: SE on March 24, 2021, 08:56:21 AM
Quality stuff, with great vocals, really enjoyed, great stuff!!
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Post by: kenny mac on March 24, 2021, 01:18:31 PM
Wow what a stunning voice,this song Ive added to a folder in my phone that I keep my favourite songcrafter tracks.
I listened to it on loop on way to work.
A great concept and your guitar woman tone is beautiful  on that short lead.
Music is outstanding.
A great song crafting moment.
But wow that voice.
Excellent.
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Post by: Mike_S on March 24, 2021, 05:14:46 PM
Wow... just wow. Don't mind telling you I got a big lump in my throat listening to this. As a parent (I guess many of us on the site are), I can feel the love in this tune. Excellently written and I don't think your good lady could have done any better with the vocals. Beautiful job.

Mike
Title: Re: Remember Me
Post by: kenny mac on March 24, 2021, 11:57:11 PM
Back for another listen.
Was driving home tonight with this song playing and the sincerity and love in the voice adds to this beautiful song.
I think that as a parent you can relate to this but the subject matter and the way the music is placed with that stunning vocal takes you on an emotional trip.
A truly exquisite song on all levels.
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Post by: Ferryman_1957 on March 25, 2021, 03:53:36 AM
I seem to have missed this one in my regular track listening, apols for that. I'm glad I found it , because like everyone else says, it's a stunner. The lyrics and storyline are superb, they really hit an emotional target without being twee or mawkish. The piano and song arrangement is excellent, but your wife's vocal is the standout here. It's superb! Does she do other forms of singing, because she really seems to know what she is doing. The sound and vocal control is fab, and the harmonies are wonderful. There is a Carpenters vibe here, which is no bad thing.

I can only agree, we need a lot more like this! Well done to both of you, this is a fantastic song.

 
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Post by: Hilary on March 25, 2021, 12:37:29 PM
Crikey I'm late to the party on this one - Stunning!

How lovely that you've done this together  :D
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Post by: Redler on March 25, 2021, 12:46:19 PM
Just a fantastic performance! Beautiful singing and playing, great lyrics as well!
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Post by: maxit on March 26, 2021, 02:21:58 PM
the song is really beautiful, and your wife's singing makes it so real and touching !!!
You both made this into a real masterpiece !!! Superlativo!!!
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Post by: Mike_S on March 26, 2021, 04:46:33 PM
Back for another listen... I just needed to hear this again. As a parent, this really hits hard. Wonderful... brought a tear to my eye. Such a lovely song.