Nice laid back vibe with this song, Stephen; got a sort of Pink Floyd feel IMO. Nicely presented and I like that spacious production.
Great stuff Steven some nice chords in there with crystal clear guitar work , deffo a 60,s vibe to this composition , the lyrics are really well put together , nice laid back feel to the song
Paul
You put such a lot of musicality into your songs and this is no exception.
Lovely :)
Love the walking feel of this and that distant vocal
I really enjoy the feel of this tune, Steve, but I'd bring up the vocal track just a bit and tone down the reverb. I know you're trying to get a "distant" effect, but you have it so buried that at times it would be hard to understand some of the words if you wouldn't have them posted. Not to pick on you, but just a suggestion. The words here deserve to be understood.
:) John B
Quote from: Johnbee on November 29, 2020, 05:48:25 AMI really enjoy the feel of this tune, Steve, but I'd bring up the vocal track just a bit and tone down the reverb. I know you're trying to get a "distant" effect, but you have it so buried that at times it would be hard to understand some of the words if you wouldn't have them posted. Not to pick on you, but just a suggestion. The words here deserve to be understood.
:) John B
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I totally understand what you are saying and i have to admit that I have another mix with the vocals higher in the mix...perhaps I will switch it...but I also have to admit I am more than insecure about my singing.... lol... I do love the lyrics though...perhaps what would be best is to see if there is someone who would like to take a crack at singing this... but i would say that I kind of want to keep the idea and the theme similar to what I did.... it is a very big theme... imo...one that can be uncomfortable to actually contemplate I would suppose...Thanks for listening and taking the time to tomment....Of all the songs i have ever done I think this is one I love very highly, not necessarily because it is that great or anything (although I love it) but because of the longing in the heart that it comes from...
Good job and like you I enjoyed the lyrics. Nice post. Willie
Agree with Pink Floyd comparison (Im big fan of PF).
You've created very captivating atmosphere here. Fine performance and some tasty lead guitar additions on the right channel. Excellent work, Stephen!
Nice work Steve. Very atmospheric and I really liked the drums on this - was that you playing? If so, great job. I like your lyrics, you don't use a conventional structure but they fit the music well. Almost like poetry set to music....
Very nice and you should not be down on your vocal they sounded good I like the song and would not mind giving it a crack send me the Base track and I will see what I can do
Tim
Quote from: Ferryman on November 30, 2020, 04:38:10 AMNice work Steve. Very atmospheric and I really liked the drums on this - was that you playing? If so, great job. I like your lyrics, you don't use a conventional structure but they fit the music well. Almost like poetry set to music....
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Nigel,
yes I am playing the Alesis drums , the Nitro kit... when I made the music for this I do this same thing way too often... I find a pattern i like playing on guitar and then I change it a bit and sometimes (too many times) it comes out hard for me to follow myself when adding parts to it...lol... but I am either too stubborn, too dumb, or too in love with it already (or too lazy), to re record it over... because you never write a song the way I do to write lyrics and sing with...and as much as I love this song...and I really do...it becomes difficult for me to even want to go on as a musician because my singing is so friggin pathetic and much as I have desire, that does not change ability...so I try very hard not to beat myself up over it...its not a matter of effort or desire...but just omg.... its kind of like being an ugly girl that no matter how hard she tries to look pretty she just isn't (and I have been around a few that way but their personality was so amazing you didn't even really notice, they became beautiful)..... so God this song is painful for me because there is such longing for it to be good....
sorry about the dang breakdown... anyway... I like the words and the basic way it is sung.... but it needs a better voice...
Quote from: TPB on November 30, 2020, 07:47:25 AMVery nice and you should not be down on your vocal they sounded good I like the song and would not mind giving it a crack send me the Base track and I will see what I can do
Tim
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I will/// it may be too big for email...do you have drop box?
Yeah, really enjoyed this Stephen. It's really trippy which is always a winner for me. I also wanted to hear the voice a tiny bit louder, but not too much, just enough to catch those lyrics a bit better. I also like the idea of everything being kind of of equal volume for this kind of track, even though it might sound a bit like everything is competing for the spotlight, but I think that could be where it gets it's trippy quality from. Don't be too shy about your voice it sounds good and it gives your song "your" identity, it draws the listener in and want to hear your song.