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Title: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Greeny (No longer active) on July 29, 2020, 08:06:46 AM
More 12-string jingle-jangle  ::), this time with just compression and phaser pedals (no distortion). Fender Jazz Bass, a dash of Hofner Verythin on the solo part, and Garageband drums and keys. All done on the MBR.

wander round with your belly out
in the wee small witching hours
come and see my music room
and i'll show you all my powers

i can't do what i'm told
even though i've grown so old
a traveller of the minor roads
je ne regret rien

there's nothing wrong with 'from the heart'
being off-kilter and burned
deconstruct reality
and the lessons that you've learned

be ramshackle

i'm not into perfection
of clipped suburban lawns
show me yours and i'll show you mine
the scars since we've been born

'cause i can't do what i'm told
even though i've grown so old
a traveller of the minor roads
je ne regret rien

there's nothing wrong with 'from the heart'
being off-kilter and burned
deconstruct reality
and the lessons that you've learned

be ramshackle

dirty-minded
broken hearted
on losing sides
since we started

there's nothing wrong with 'from the heart'
being off-kilter and burned
deconstruct reality
and the lessons that you've learned

be ramshackle, ramshackle, yeah!
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: maxit on July 29, 2020, 01:30:29 PM
An Anthem to me, i wanna sing it till i'm blue lol !
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Mike_S on July 29, 2020, 02:58:24 PM
Great tune Tim. Very catchy... I like the sentiment as well... Ramshackle is cool and not a massive fan of highly manicured suburban gardens either... but a great song and very well produced too. Sounds like you are having fun with the 12 string!

Mike
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: hardlock on July 29, 2020, 10:37:01 PM
Ramshackle should be my theme song! Great one! Love the chorus harmony. It tugs on a melody string from my past somewhere. And that's always a good thing!
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Farrell Jackson on July 30, 2020, 08:03:02 AM
A real appealing song Tim! The 12 string has the jingle jangle sound but it also has a cool bottom end to it. I like that! The choice of the thin lead solo fits perfectly with the rest of the mix. Creative lyric as well and some fine vox, all of them. Nicely done!

Farrell
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Ferryman_1957 on July 30, 2020, 10:20:09 AM
Wow! This is a stunner, one of my absolute faves from you. I love the sound of the 12 string, you really nailed it on this one. It sounds rich and sparkly but there's not too much jingle jangle. Fab. And the song structure and chord changes are superb, I really liked the three sections before the "be ramshackle" hook. And the hook and the harmonies are great, so well done and so catchy. I loved the solo as well, very nicely done and the bass is just how I like my bass - melodic and interesting and creating a great counterpoint to the guitars. The whole thing drives along and just demands to be played again and again. Which I did.

However, and here's the but, for the first time I didn't like the lyrics  :o In fact I found them a bit upsetting. That's because I suffer from obsessive compulsive personality disorder (Google it, it explains a lot about me..... ;D) and there's nothing I love MORE than a beautifully manicured suburban lawn!!! I used to pick the weeds out of mine by hand and the stripes on my lawn were a joy to behold (I am really not kidding here). So the idea of being ramshackle is an anathema to me. But I do get where you are coming from...... ;)

I still loved the song though.  It really is an absolute killer!
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Greeny (No longer active) on July 30, 2020, 01:58:16 PM
I can relate... I'm OCD too (amongst other things...). But not with tidiness as such. I just need everything under control and in the correct order that my anxiety demands. Things like having the right strap and strap locks on all my guitars, and having them arranged in a very specific pecking order, and knowing where specific plectrums are, and noticing if anybody has touched or moved them. And then I'll obsess about album track orders, playlist collections, album cover designs, and whether my Les Paul is better with or without a pickguard... it's never ending. Kind of a disability  ;D

Quote from: Ferryman on July 30, 2020, 10:20:09 AMWow! This is a stunner, one of my absolute faves from you. I love the sound of the 12 string, you really nailed it on this one. It sounds rich and sparkly but there's not too much jingle jangle. Fab. And the song structure and chord changes are superb, I really liked the three sections before the "be ramshackle" hook. And the hook and the harmonies are great, so well done and so catchy. I loved the solo as well, very nicely done and the bass is just how I like my bass - melodic and interesting and creating a great counterpoint to the guitars. The whole thing drives along and just demands to be played again and again. Which I did.

However, and here's the but, for the first time I didn't like the lyrics  :o In fact I found them a bit upsetting. That's because I suffer from obsessive compulsive personality disorder (Google it, it explains a lot about me..... ;D) and there's nothing I love MORE than a beautifully manicured suburban lawn!!! I used to pick the weeds out of mine by hand and the stripes on my lawn were a joy to behold (I am really not kidding here). So the idea of being ramshackle is an anathema to me. But I do get where you are coming from...... ;)

I still loved the song though.  It really is an absolute killer!
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Redler on July 30, 2020, 11:09:01 PM
Brilliant pop song, again! I loved this right from the start, it's so catchy both on verses and chorus.

On the third listening while having my morning coffee...
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: IanR on July 31, 2020, 12:10:42 AM
Thanks Tim,

Lovely piece of 1980s pop.

Could easily have been written by Mills, Stipe Buck and Berry.

Love the 12 string. Nothing better than jangly guitars.

Bass provides a wonderful counterpoint as well.

Best wishes,

Ian

Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: kenny mac on August 02, 2020, 02:45:00 AM
Excellent greeny the 12 string has really inspired you.
Think you've inspired a few people to get one.
Ive no room for any more,,,or have I ? ;D
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: chapperz66 on August 02, 2020, 03:12:01 AM
Jangle-city!  Great song again.

I spend a totally insane amount of time on the lawn.  And clipping box plants.  I have trained pyrachantha across the front of my bungalow and risk serious injury clipping it since it is like natural barbed-wire.  Flowers I can live without, but green things I like.

Mind you, my next door neighbor has the most impeccable lawns imaginable.  They are more like fine carpets with deep underlay.  Totally puts me to shame.

My brother has replaced his grass with artificial lawn.  Aarrghh!
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Oldrottenhead on August 02, 2020, 04:04:20 AM
playing catch up here, finding lots of great songs on the music player, this is a belter Tim, killer prog pop.
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Mike_S on August 02, 2020, 07:10:59 AM
Just returned from a mission to trim/prune bushes in the back garden and remembered this thread. I can confirm I make a very poor gardener and my handiwork and attention to detail was called into question by HQ!
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: SE on August 02, 2020, 01:38:59 PM
Great Greeny pop, just so well produced and recorded, a great listen!!!
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: AndyR on August 02, 2020, 03:43:36 PM
Cool tune.

To join in the garden discussions: Ramshackle fits our garden... but it's looking really good this year. I'm not terribly into gardening myself, but I will admit to having put a quite a bit of effort into our lawn in the back garden this year. No-one told us it needed anything more than mowing, and after ten years or so it's kinda died on us (it has many enemies, the rubble underneath it, the jasmine next to it nicking all the water, the F***ING foxes - HATE the f-ing things - and various weeds and moss...). This year, it has been fed and iron sulphated, scarified and spiked and... I believe I have saved it... YAY! ... there is top-dressing and reseeding to come... but I have high hopes for next year... however, it's never gonna be one of those luxurious striped carpet things... I'll be happy if it just has grass on it! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Johnbee on August 04, 2020, 11:50:31 AM
Great tune.  Love the chord changes and lyrics.

 :) John B
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Jarle on August 05, 2020, 12:03:35 PM
This is really catchy, I'm signing along.
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Hilary on August 07, 2020, 04:25:41 AM
Nice one Tim - I particularly liked the lyrics and the ramshakle hook.

I'm not great at being told what to do . . .
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Frank53 on August 07, 2020, 06:16:55 AM
This is great, Tim! Love the sound of that 12-string, especially with the phaser. Nice clean recording, and spot-on performance. Nothing wrong with blazing your own trail in life.
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: TPB on August 07, 2020, 06:29:52 AM
Well that new 12 string is getting put through its paces with great results got the Tom Petty vibe from this song which is good thing for me well done
Tim
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: maxit on August 15, 2020, 10:04:12 AM
That happens when using great imagery lol. Dont be shy, i will begin
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Bluesberry on February 27, 2021, 05:40:35 PM
I love this.....a thing of beauty...

...and I can totally relate to the OCPD discussion.....yup....
Quote from: Ferryman on July 30, 2020, 10:20:09 AMThat's because I suffer from obsessive compulsive personality disorder (Google it, it explains a lot about me..... ;D)
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: Kenneth on February 27, 2021, 10:29:47 PM
Just bumping this. I am a  Greeny fan , have been since I got here.
Please make me feel better and record something terrible? Lol
Title: Re: Ramshackle - Greeny Original
Post by: StephenM on February 28, 2021, 03:55:47 AM
On the lawn and garden discussion.... mine is a bit like my music....so you can imagine... I'm very tight-loose... I'm a bit wild,.... and definetely unpredictable.... our home is more like a camp...lots of wild, a little tame... weeds that get cut with the mower... and lots of crushed stone... i love rocks and stones... then theres all the trees on the edges... gorgeous trees...
the music here is wonderful as are pretty much everything Tim does... glad this got bumped...I listen to your juke box Tim but there are over 300 songs and I have not heard all of em yet...