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Title: You Can't Come In
Post by: The Gobi Desert Canoe Club on June 05, 2020, 09:03:56 AM
Hi all, hope you are all well, here's a bit of a bar room brawler hope you enjoy.

Epiphone Les Paul, Fender Precision, Fender Electro Acoustic, Drums BR900 CD

Well I staggered home about a quarter past three
And there she was she was waiting for me
She said you can't come in
Oh no you can't come in
Go back to where you came from
But honey you can't come in

Well just at that moment it started to rain
I started knocking on that big old door again
She said you can't come in
Oh no you can't come in
Go back to where you came from
But honey you can't come in

Well five minutes later I was soaking to the skin
I said now baby you gotta let me in
She said I luv yer but you ain't no good
Why can't you love me like a good man, like a good man should

 Instrumental

I loooked at my watch it was a quarter past five
And I was feeling more dead than alive
She said you can't come in
Oh no you can't come in
Go back to where you came from
But honey you can't come in
Go back to where you came from
But honey you aIn't coming in
Go back to where you came from
But honey you can't come in

Outro
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: AndyR on June 05, 2020, 09:31:43 AM
Oh yeah.

Love how it rolls along. Those vocals on the "you can't come in" hook - almost gets the same vibe as a horn section.
And cool guitars.

Yep its an all round winner for me.
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: danthecoat on June 05, 2020, 09:37:40 AM
Well ive been there my friend (lol)

I was so hoping he would eventually get in........................I always did :)

Brilliant song, The lyrics and vocals are bang on and the lead guitar is fantastic. Love the format.....Well done !!!
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Greeny (No longer active) on June 05, 2020, 09:57:24 AM
Nice punchy blues with a cool swagger. The Les Paul sounds great - just the right amount of dirt. Some lovely lead lines too. Excellent performance and a catchy chorus - what's not to like?
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Ferryman_1957 on June 06, 2020, 01:07:15 AM
I really like this one Willie. A great laid-back shuffle groove going on there with some really nice unexpected chord changes in the blues. Guitars sound fab and I love the wide, lush production. The vocals are great, and the lyrics are perfect for the song. The backing "ohh wap wap" bits are great when they come in.

Very nicely done, fantastic production and superbly played and performed.
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Farrell Jackson on June 06, 2020, 08:13:09 AM
Hey Willie I'm diggin' this blues shuffle with a hint of country rock flavor. That Epi LP has some great tone and you nailed that solo. Andy R said you're getting a horn vibe with those backing vocals and I agree whole heartedly....tight! Cool vocals, storyline, and songwriting!

Farrell
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Hook on June 06, 2020, 01:13:17 PM
What a cool tune brother, love the RoadHouse feel.
Rock on!
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Mike_S on June 06, 2020, 03:37:07 PM
Haha... fabulous. This is great. This would be so good live. It has that rock with a slight country twang. But best of all are those lyrics and that brilliant story. They took me back to a specific night about 15 years ago where I made it home but couldn't get the key in the door, whereupon I lay down and went to sleep at the front door... I was let in but it's not a pretty story!!!
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Johnbee on June 06, 2020, 07:15:02 PM
Nice.  I love the chord changes you use.  Very clever.

 :) John B
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Ella on June 07, 2020, 04:15:28 PM
Oh yes! Very nice laid-back blues! So confident guitar-playing and performance and great lyrics.
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: thetworegs on June 08, 2020, 02:54:47 AM
This is beauty Willie loving the laid back solo
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: Blooby on June 14, 2020, 07:25:29 PM

Great post all the way around. Always love your lead tones, not to mention the tasty note choice, especially when you play through that turnaround.

Blooby
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: tonyc on June 16, 2020, 01:24:01 PM
great blues track willie , ive had a few nights like that in my past when i used to hit the bottle , brill song . cheers tony cee
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: TPB on June 17, 2020, 09:38:03 AM
Great track Willie would love to put some harp on this one
Tim
Title: Re: You Can't Come In
Post by: kenny mac on June 18, 2020, 09:07:00 AM
Excellent mate  another well crafted song.
Bravo.
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