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Title: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Ted on February 04, 2017, 12:19:43 PM
This one has been pitched to a new collaborator -- someone who I think might be a good match for the kind of music I'm feeling motivated to produce these days. She's a bass player (like me) so I've left out bass for her to add. She might add another verse, but this is all me for now.

"Lullaby"
(c)2017 Ted Johnson
Recorder: Micro BR
Ted: Ukulele, Guitar, Vocals, Drum sequencing
You're not doing anything wrong.
No one's gonna make you change.
All of your convictions are true. Everybody that you hate deserves it.
Now go to sleep my baby.
Go to sleep my baby.

Something scared you today.
Let me tell you a story.
Make the facts go away.
Let me cover your eyes.


You've had a very big day
Playing with all of your big toys.
Don't worry 'bout the mess that you made. Somebody else will clean it up for you.
Now go to sleep my baby.
Go to sleep my baby.

chorus
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Groundy on February 04, 2017, 10:51:55 PM
This is fantastic Ted, love the build up,
So well written and performed,
Love it............


Alex
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: stoman on February 05, 2017, 06:59:52 AM
Very promising.  I'm looking forward to hearing the full version with bass.
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Oldrottenhead on February 06, 2017, 01:15:06 AM
loving the uke, and look forward to hearing added bass. great lyrics with a lot of depth that could be interpreted in so many different ways, i dread to think who may be playing with the big toys and making a mess.
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Johnny Robbo on February 06, 2017, 01:24:41 AM
Lovely song! Well done, mate!
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Redler on February 06, 2017, 01:30:25 AM
Loved the uke too! Well played and recorded!

The guitar and drums puts a tasty flavor to this. Fine vocal melodies as well!

Quote from: Oldrottenhead on February 06, 2017, 01:15:06 AMi dread to think who may be playing with the big toys and making a mess.

Me too ;)
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Ted on February 06, 2017, 11:13:28 AM
Well, my collaborator doesn't have time for this right now, so I'll have to do the bass by myself. I'm still mulling whether this needs another verse or something else in the middle.

I think I'm going to try this technique (https://songcrafters.org/forum/index.php?topic=22964.0) for recording vocals.
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: cuthbert on February 06, 2017, 11:49:09 AM
Great song, Ted - really love the dynamics, and the uke sounds fab. And thanks for that link - I might have to try a technique or two myself!
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: fenderbender on February 06, 2017, 01:44:06 PM
Top class song Ted
Congratulations



Tommy
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Ted on February 06, 2017, 11:11:28 PM
Soo...

What are your thoughts among the following options:


I have an idea for a third verse, but I'm not sure the song needs one to establish the idea.

I'm not much of a soloist.
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: CaptainJimbo on February 06, 2017, 11:53:33 PM
Beautiful song man, I think that the structure sounds great as does your vocals.
I think that a bass line would certainly fatten out the sound and if you were to add a solo, I think the perfect sound would be that of a wind up music box. I'm sure that you could find a synth patch with that effect on it.
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Ted on February 07, 2017, 01:35:11 AM
Quote from: CaptainJimbo on February 06, 2017, 11:53:33 PMI think the perfect sound would be that of a wind up music box. I'm sure that you could find a synth patch with that effect on it.

Interesting idea. I have a Kaossilator-type thing that I can use to MIDI into Garage Band...
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Hook on February 07, 2017, 06:50:17 AM
"Everybody that you hate deserves it"
might be my favorite sentence ever!  3rd verse would have to be pretty damn good. I'd add bass  but not sure about anything else.
Nice!
Rock on!
Title: Re: "Lullaby" -- Original (in progress) by Ted
Post by: Ted on February 12, 2017, 12:25:48 PM
Finished Version >> (https://songcrafters.org/forum/index.php?topic=26323.0)