Post Your Work => Original Songs => Topic started by: artokh74 on May 22, 2016, 11:10:42 AM
Title: I Will Rise Again
Post by: artokh74 on May 22, 2016, 11:10:42 AM
this phoenix finally arose from the midst of a terrible writer's block. :)
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I'm arriving at the shore at my summer home to keep a word I once swore Clean warm air in my lungs Under the morning sun Everything will be just fine
Unlock the garden gate that you loved to decorate in the years before the war When we followed the sun we were the chosen ones But our paths never would quite align
Oh! I will rise again from the pain with the summer rain Oh! I will rise again from the pain with the summer rain
Summer celebrations were on with a pyre and a troubadour Food and drink galore And when the music stopped after the first rain drops escalated fast to a pour
You ran to grab my arm as we rushed inside the house to keep shelter from the storm And it's still quite bizarre how did things get this far and how fast the Fall would follow
Oh! I will rise again from the pain with the summer rain Oh! I will rise again from the pain with the summer rain
Oh! I will rise again from the pain with the summer rain Oh! I will rise again from the pain with the summer rain
Title: Re: I Will Rise Again
Post by: artokh74 on May 27, 2016, 02:34:48 AM
Reminds me of Hotel California meets George Gershwin's 'Summertime' meets Dire Straits. With a bit of Geir thrown in on the vocal! Which is all good!
That chorus is a killer.
I'll second that emotion! I'd also say that the production on this is absolutely gob-smackingly good!
Title: Re: I Will Rise Again
Post by: bruno on June 04, 2016, 01:13:51 AM
Great song - love the vid, brings it all together. Particularly loved the key change between verse and chorus - nicely done. Would like to know what the inspiration/story behend the lyrics are? B
Title: Re: I Will Rise Again
Post by: Blooby on June 05, 2016, 05:58:33 AM
Great production on a cool tune. I was especially enamored of the bass sound although I can't pinpoint why. Sounds great, though. I also dug how the chorus re-entered the verses. Nice space with the electric. Enjoyed this. Interesting ending which was super effective as well.
Blooby
Title: Re: I Will Rise Again
Post by: Oldrottenhead on June 06, 2016, 04:32:37 PM
really like this one something about it reminds me of my Norge hero St Thomas (Thomas Hansen) i think it might be your syntax, juxtaposing lyrics a natural english speaker would never think of combining. that and the music combined is beautiful to my ears. Bra!
Title: Re: I Will Rise Again
Post by: artokh74 on June 29, 2016, 03:28:39 PM
Amazing feedback. Thanks a lot!
Oldrottenhead, I actually do intentionally - and sometimes unintentionally no doubt- use English "the wrong way", using structures and syntax more common in other languages. It's a difficult thing to balance though. So it's great to hear it can be seen as an interesting effect rather than just a flaw by a natural English speaker. :)