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Title: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Hook on October 22, 2013, 03:48:42 PM
My first recording playing the Yamaha YDD-60 drumkit. All tracks except drums were recorded in Nissan Sentra Studios. The piano is using Garagebands smart keys & bass is Thumbjams bowed bass
1- Grand piano (GB) (stereo)
1- drums (mono)
1- bowed bass (TJ)
2- mandolin tracks
1- vocal (stereo)
Ashes
written & performed by Hook
Can I call on you tomorrow?
Can I count on you today?
Would you still stand by my side?
 Or have I burned that bridge away

Ashes to ashes, not quite dust
My smooth, sleek finish is beginning to rust
This carefully crafted façade
Up to now I have maintained
& as the curtain falls
It becomes clear who's to blame

Can I meet you in the middle?
Or is it much too late for that
I'm not sure who I should portray
Can you help me pick a hat?

Spread myself to thin
I put Vaseline where butter should have been
I've spoiled all my soil
& there will be no harvest at all
& there will be no harvest at all
& time slows down to a crawl

Can I offer an alternative, perhaps a better day
A golden path with flashing arrows
That light up the way

Where spirits lift or leave or come
I don't think I know
Spirits tied between the lines
Next to the ebb but under the flow

Ashes fall like rain & coat the world
A second skin
Will mystery remain for the next of kin?
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Mike_S on October 22, 2013, 04:57:08 PM
Lovely stuff. I really like the vocals and tone in the voice. Reminding me of Ian Gillan (Deep Purple) a little - nice warm tone.
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Redler on October 23, 2013, 12:15:39 AM
Wonderful tune and superb execution on each way! Rock on!
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Greeny on October 23, 2013, 01:57:52 AM
So good. I love the mandolins especially, but the whole arrangement is beautiful - and lush. Feels like a really well-crafted song with huge amounts of depth and poignancy. Lovely stuff.

"I put Vaseline where butter should have been"

...Last Tango in Paris?????!
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Hilary on October 23, 2013, 05:07:38 AM
Quote from: Greeny on October 23, 2013, 01:57:52 AM"I put Vaseline where butter should have been"

...Last Tango in Paris?????!

Oh I'm really trying not to comment on that one  ::)

It sounds great Hook, softer on the vox than some of your originals and the mando is a great addition.
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: The Gobi Desert Canoe Club on October 23, 2013, 10:45:18 AM
Don't yer just love that Garageband. This is superb. Ticks all the boxes and some I don't even know about.  Roscoe
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: bruno on October 24, 2013, 11:54:15 AM
Great track Bro - excellent sounds, piano sounds awesome, along with the mando, lyrics and vox.
flippin A1
:-)
B
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Kenny B on October 24, 2013, 01:18:59 PM
Excellent song Hook!!!   All sounds fantastic.  Especially the piano and mandolins.  Great composition!!!

kb
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: ODH on October 25, 2013, 03:48:19 AM
Abrupt.  Nice

Great sounds.  Nice mix of real and virtual instrumentation.
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Jarle on October 25, 2013, 10:48:24 AM

Nice song.
Quote from: Mike_S on October 22, 2013, 04:57:08 PMLovely stuff. I really like the vocals and tone in the voice. Reminding me of Ian Gillan (Deep Purple) a little - nice warm tone.

I see what you mean, and I agree.
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: Burtog on October 25, 2013, 01:21:56 PM
Great toon Hook, really liking the piano sounds. Excellent.
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: stuart3645 on October 25, 2013, 02:31:27 PM
yeah i really like the piano on this one, sounds frantic but still in control. coolio.. ;D
Title: Re: "Ashes" a Hook original
Post by: SteveB on October 25, 2013, 03:05:39 PM
Fine instrumentation and ambient sound&recording + strong lyrics and vocal. Nice.   8)
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