Biggest Sale in Town - By Donna D. / Drumbum / Ken

Started by Kenneth, November 18, 2010, 02:15:47 PM

Kenneth



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This is the newspaper article on this tragedy.
http://www.nytimes.com/2008/11/30/nyregion/30walmart.html?_r=1

Thanks to Drumbum for your patience in laying down such an awesome drum track.
Donna, thanks for the advice, suggestions and support.


Donna sez: Some of you may remember the November 2008 incident when a young man, Jdimytai "Jimbo" Damour, was trampled to death by frenzied shoppers in an early-morning "Black Friday" sale at a Wal-Mart in Long Island. No one - including Wal-Mart, which had cut costs on security and building safety - was ever held responsible.

I never thought the lyric would become a song. At least not until Ken pounced on it, and drumbum followed suit.    Thank you both! Great job! 



Biggest Sale in Town

[Narrated intro:When a reporter asked Mahatma Gandhi what he thought of Western civilisation, he replied:
"I think it would be a very good idea."]

(v1)
Jimbo's first work day
At the Green Acres Mall
Valley Stream's finest
Bargains waiting for all
Two thousand people gathered
For "gifts worth waking for"
A 5 am opening
For discounts galore               

Pre-chorus
Raise the flag for greed and profit
Top-brand widescreen
Fifty percent off it

Chorus
Must have felt like Armageddon
When their boots smashed in his face
The horde in a frenzy
Trying to be the first in place

(v2)
[The] metal doorframe buckled
The herd stampeded through
No Security to stop them
Nothing anyone could do
A temporary worker
Now he's permanently gone
Tried to earn an honest dollar
That he's never bringing home

Pre-chorus
Raise the flag for greed and profit
A six-piece luggage set
Seventy percent off it

Chorus
Must have felt like Armageddon
When their boots smashed in his face
[The] horde in a frenzy
Trying to be the first in place

Instrumental

Bridge
Wasn't just the crowd
The venue was at fault
Penny-pinched on Crowd Control
With billions in the vault
Nearly happened twice before
The bosses paid no heed
No one held accountable
For the senseless tragedy

Chorus
Must have felt like Armageddon
When their boots smashed in his face
The horde in a frenzy
Trying to be the first in place
Did Jimbo feel his lungs collapse
As the heels hammered down
Nailed him to the bargain floor
At the biggest Sale in town

Instrumental
Epilogue/Outro
[Voices shouting in the background.][*In an online video, people could be seen crowded against the plate-glass window, watching the medical team and jostling to get a better view.]
Someone grab a coffee, pass me a 'burger
Hell, this is better than reality TV
I've gotta watch this
It's really something...

© 2008-2010 Donna Devine
Biggest Sale in Town
by Donna Devine / Drums by Drumbum / Music by Ken / Opening line by Donna
see drumbums post below for song

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Geir

This song is so powerful !!! Both in the message and in the performance  !!!

Really a fabolous collab that's reached an even higher level now with real drums on it. Really great drums there drumbum  !!
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Oh well ........

danieldesete

Hey Donna I new there was a punk hiding inside of you. Love those lyrics ! a great post !
hou hou ha ha

Bluesberry

HOLY SHIT...sorry for swearing but holy shit man this is heavy.  Drumbum's real drums sound very good, great groove.  Music is fantastic and the vocals are insane, just so good.  Over the top in exactly the way they need to be.  This song is over the top, and so is the subject matter, it all ties together into a monster.  Fantastic lyrics from Donna brought to life.  I flipping love it.

Alternate Tunings: CAUTION: your fingers have to be in different places
 
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Oldrottenhead

this should be on sale in asda (uk retailer owned by wal-mart) braw tell yer maw
whit goes oan in ma heid



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dasilvasings

These collaborations are reaching a very high level of quality! The story is revolting, not only because a man has died, but because he died in such a stupid way! Scary!
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If you swim against the tide long enough, it turns and becomes momentum.........

Ted

I really like these additions, drumbum.

I've listened to all the iterations of this song now. If I can be a teensy bit critical... Can I? I think the Gandhi bit at the beginning--although a great quote--begins the song with too heavy a hand. It serves as a didactic warning bell, and I brace myself for a social critique rather than being surprised by it. The song takes deadly aim at Western consumerism without that bit.

That was tactful, wasn't it?
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Gnasty

I like that beginning actually..Makes you think then starts rockin!! NICE!!

So after reading the article on a senseless death because people like to shop. I`d have to say this is one hell of a collab..Great wurds Donna and Drumbum pulls through again with them drums. Have you ever had your drums stolen from you while you play DB? https://songcrafters.org/community/index.php?topic=9302.msg125379;topicseen#new

And Ken..I`ve been listening and rocking out to your tunes today on my Mp3. Heard shit i haven`t heard before. Just awesome. I like your panning and producing skills. Great work on this too.

QuoteMy wife heard the song a couple weeks ago and said I dont suit serious sings and that I should stick to comedy if i'm going to sing a song! lol
P.S Your wife is wrong. You can do anything. In fact if i ever write a serious tune. You`ll be singing it for me! Or maybe I`ll think of another gross one for you to sing for comedyfest. How bout an STD song??;D

Peace!!
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Right next to my mashed potatoes.