First try at poetry, wanting honest opinions...

[Maverick31]

Evil inside

Look in my eyes there's evil inside
you runaway fast, but where will you hide?
Take my hand there's nothing to fear
if you don't want my love then why are you here?

The thoughts inside my head will explode
Pull them all out before I grow cold
you say that it's over but how did we start?
These foolish games are breaking my heart

Where is the touch that chills my skin?
I want to feel her but love sometimes hurts
Tell me the lies so I won't feel the pain
When you release me I'm falling again

My mind is wandering, the evil brain
But in your eyes my thoughts are insane
It's time to decide, I know the price
when she comes near her touch cold as ice

She touches my spine I shiver with lust
then she turns me away and I cry in her dust
But when she's gone there's no cold hand
The loneliness kills me with a pain I can't stand

But the pain must continue, will it ever go?
Till it starts all over we'll never know
and if she comes calling, can I keep being strong?
The days are useless and the nights are gone.

[Maverick31]

My Nette...


Why can't you feel me?
My every beat
my every moment where there is silence but yet still cries?
Why can't you feel me?

I wish I could lay my hand upon yours ever so slowly,
to tell you to "hang on" for the ride,
to where every emotion passes through me to you like a strike of lightning,

Jolt you,
Shock you...
Just so you can feel me.

I can't say it anymore,
I cannot transliterate,
and the words just do not come out or make sense.

I can't move,
I can't breathe,
till you feel me.

I wish I could jolt you;
I wish I could shock you...
Damn I so wish you could just feel me.

I wouldn't have to explain,
I wouldn't have to form breaths of expression,
Just to look in your innocent eyes and feel you.

To hold you,
No words,
Nothing but touch,
Till my energy passes through your delicate body,
Till my mind you can see,

I just want to be one with you,
I just want forever salvation and acceptance,
So "hang on" for the ride,
Because I just want you to...feel me...

[Maverick31]

Self-Induced Pain



How can I live within myself?


Vacant shell, dwelling...


Seemingly forever in agony


Once was worthy, now a disgrace


Intellect previously apt, has been perplexed


Some accomplishment, many catastrophes


Ill-advised ventures to satisfy self indulgence


Creating adversity to all whom I treasure


Salvation...


Breach through this captivity!


Utilize passion of revere


Though my devotion of others


Imposing my buried virtuosity


Perpetual love I will comprise

[Maverick31]

Self Imprisonment


I suppose somewhere inside me

I yearn for freedom from

That which holds me stagnant

Over exaggeration turns underestimated

Emotion...

Why the urgency to hide and

Slow the flow of that which could

And perhaps will, improve and

Heal the burning inside

I am protecting my Pain

It is mine

And I so badly want to keep my

Pain to myself

But in doing so I am hurting

So many who cross or care for me

Aching for love and acceptance

Only to throw you down in the latter

Of love and shared love

Yet anger and guilt not shared between

Me and you

You are blamed for all that is a mystery

Within myself – Burning

Oh I beg that I might someday

Throw a blanket over that angry child

If the strength is found within the

Core of my being...

Tears soak my heart and weight

It down

I am tired, I am numb and I am so very, very lonely

I am...

[Maverick31]

End of the Road



Tormented by the thoughts in my mind,
Left in a comatose state...
Broken by the choke hold of life,
How can one live in this vacant shell?

Lost in thoughts,
consuming my sick head...
No pride, no strength, cause my emotional state...
Only one inevitable fate.

Once was worthy, now a disgrace...
In eternal agony, misery my only place,
Please take my burning pain away.
Can this cruel reality be true?

Soul is bleeding, heart soaked in tears.
Loneliness, despair, disappointment, my only friend.
Hope, salvation, and serenity, out of mind.
No way out, abandoned soul must be set free.

The end must be...

[Maverick31]

Emotional hell...



Tormented by these thoughts in my mind,
Broken by the choke hold of life,
searching for a way out...
Not wanting to cause hurt to everyone.


Lost in thoughts,
they take over my mind...
My pride, my strength, my emotional state...
They all question my Fate.


Should I stay,
Should I go,
who would care. I still feel alone!!


I'm frightened by the words the voices say,
They tell me to take my life,
It's easier this way.


I believe it for a moment;
I look at my kids,
that can't be true...
They look like innocent little angels.


Oh no here they come again,
These voices seem to have me pinned,
In a comatose state...
Like I am down for surgery,
to end this hell I live...


Should I stay,
Should I go,
who would care. I still feel alone!

[Maverick31]

My one and only

Does it have to hurt like this?
How did things run so amiss?
Whatever happened to perpetual bliss?
Feeling as cold as winter wind.

All of these torturing thoughts running will in my head
Tear me apart as my heart turns to lead.
What is she doing? What is she thinking?
Does she know that I'm rapidly sinking?

Never have I loved so dearly.
From loving her can I not refrain?
With her forever will my heart remain?
My tears pour like torrential rain.
Taking with them my resistance to pain.

My intentions never were sadistic,
I thought of us as the love linguistic.
But now we are emotionally driven apart
Evil desperately trying to destroy our art.

To this day the promise stands
Even though you my slip through my hands
To keep her safe and away from harm
I would give my life, soul, with no hesitation.

So as long as I am alive and able
I will always be your guardian angel.

[Maverick31]

Not only would I love your comments, but I'd like also try to get help with how to either turn some of these into song lyrics.

[Satchwood]

Very expressive writings Mav - impressive too and heart felt!  You just gotta connect with some of the musical talent on this site and you'll be popping out some great songs in no time!

[OsCKilO]

Hey Bro!


Awesome Poems!


I can Hear Lincon Park Singing These...


A friend of mine Writes Poetry.... I Put some Guitar Behind some of his verse once

https://songcrafters.org/community/index.php?topic=5574.0

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8549955

[soundclick]8549955[/soundclick]

This was a smoochie one...


It Helps if you record the Vocals First to give an Idea of how you want the Track to flow...






Peace Bro


T(Osckilo)