Stuck need more verses

Started by IanForster, January 11, 2010, 06:50:18 AM

IanForster

Lyrics are really hard work for me I usually get a few verses like below then get stuck.
If anyone could come up with a few more verses in a similar format that would be great.

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No Reason to Stay
No Reason to Go
No Reason to Stand Up
So I'll just lie low

No Reason to be happy
No Reason to be Sad
No Reason to be Good
So Im going to be bad

No Reason to laugh
No Reason to Cry
No Reason to Live
But I dont want to die

.....


ian

Glenn Mitchell

#1
Nothing wrong with this as a start.
It's nicely boiled down to the essences.
Wordyness is a common problem.
It's amazing how few lyrics some great songs have.
EG you might sing this slowly and have a "call and answer" instrumental space in between each line. That would make it plenty long. (Try for 3 to 4 min max)
You might consider that you already have all the verses you need and just write a chorus that sums up what you are trying to say and use it in between the verses.
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Nelson

#2
Ok here you are Ian.

No reason to write
Why answer the call.
No reason to feel
anything at all...

No reason to dream
of a future you see.
It's getting harder to find
a Reason To Be.

Now go knock m dead, Ian.

-Nelson


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