Temujin

Started by Tramway, May 26, 2009, 01:20:57 AM

Tramway

Temujin
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I've been playing around with the guitar parts for this song for some time now, but never really had any lyrics for it.  So I just quickly wrote these ones after finishing a book about the rise of Genghis Khan by Conn Iggulden recently.  Temujin was his childhood name.  I'm not completely happy with the lyrics and vocals, but any feedback would be appreciated.

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joseph

I like it. The lyrics are very informative! :P
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Geir

Lovely song! Guitar following the vox is a great effect on this !

Keep'em coming!!
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Greeny

There's a great feel to the guitars and song structure. I'd add some backing vox and maybe some reverb to the main vocal. Definitely worth spending some more time on, as it's a really good song. And I love the dreamy guitar solo.

launched

You put everything together great here!! Drums, vox, panning, levels, mix and great solo!! You did it all well here. Agree that backing vox could be put to good use here.

More, please!!

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Facemask93

Nice song man , needs a little reverb on vox , but saying that , great song , really good effort , and well recorded , keep em coming.




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Rockatron

Dear Tramway, this is a great song.  I love the rythym and it's pace.  It's quite soothing.  Geir is right, the voice following the guitar notes makes it nice and captivating.  Did you use the built-in mic for this? 
Can't wait to hear more comp from you Tramway! ;)
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Very nice song Tram!  Catchy tune & singing!
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