Years In

Started by allysonmarie, March 30, 2014, 06:58:41 PM

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A poem I wrote and chose to sing. Despite how upset I was at the time, I had fun playing around with the arrangement.

Years In

Wait a moment.
Ease away from him.
Open your eyes and find
Your way away from him...

Yes -- I am angry.
Full of rage and fault.
Yes -- I've been lying.
You are trying. I am not.

I forget why it is I'm here.
Years in and my purpose
Has yet to be made clear.
I tell you all,
My dying day is near.

As driven as the rain pours down.
And once there and found,
Might my spirit be kept sealed?
Be sound...

This comes out superb and I can see the potential. I've been writing poems also but I still don't know how to create melody. So, good job to you!

allysonmarie

Quote from: kopikatsu on March 30, 2014, 08:38:57 PMThis comes out superb and I can see the potential. I've been writing poems also but I still don't know how to create melody. So, good job to you!

I understand. I still feel as if I don't know what I'm doing most of the time with my music...lol Good luck to you with your writing and thank you for listening.

Hook

Very nice, I just get lost in your voice. Great performance.
Rock On!

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Jarle

You write some powerful songs.. I don't think this recording does your song, voice or playing any justice. I would like to hear a proper recording of this song.
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Groundy

As I have said before you have a fantastic voice, and this goes to prove it. well done...............Alex :)

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If I had known i was going to be this thirsty this morning I'd of had another Beer last night...

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bruno

Fabulous voice, a very emotional song. Makes me feel a little sad, as a father of two grown up daughters (now), I recognise some of those emotions having to had to pick up the pieces sometimes in their earlier years. However out of the other side, there is nothing but fun and joy and laugher. I would love to hear you sing some happy tunes, I'm sure that you would knock it out of the park.
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Be happy.
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Bluesberry

Son-of-a-gun this is powerful stuff.  I love this one.  I agree with Jarle, imagine how this would sound recorded at high quality........huge.

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Another great quality song performed or perhaps I should say felt wonderfully. Roscoe
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Michael McIntyre

This is such a passionate and affecting song.  "Years in" is also a great title and phrase, by the way.  It's simple and concise, and yet powerful - I would never have thought of it.  You're very talented.  And I have to agree with the others that this song cries out for a better recording.