What More?

Started by allysonmarie, March 14, 2014, 09:00:38 AM

allysonmarie



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This is a video for a song I wrote and recorded a while ago. The art is my own, original paintings/drawings.


https://www.ebutuoy.com/watch?v=mmAg6oLXTSY


What More?


The end of the end
I will admit I've been impatient
Attempt after attempt
To bend until broken
And let's not pretend I'm not ruined
I'm ruined, but I have tried my best

I don't dream, I don't imagine
In mind all is grey, all is cold
All has fallen gone
I wait to die

I'm tired...so tired
What more do you want from me?
When I've never been able to want
Or love anything fully enough
The life I waste for all I haven't done
A change will never come

Though little I care to survive
However it matters, it happens, I get by
What more do you want from me?
What more do I have to be?

When I'm right where I belong?
Here behind my brick wall, so tall
Thrown against again and again
How has it not killed me yet?

Attempt after attempt...
I've tried my best
What more do you want from me?
How soulless do I have to be?

Farrell Jackson

Those are some very good paintings...you are a talented artist of canvas and song!

Farrell
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Test, test, one, two, three.....is this mic on?

Gritter

I really enjoyed the song. It has a heart wrenching melody. Your paintings and drawings are remarkable. You are deeply expressive both visually and musically. Very powerful stuff.

Jarle

This is really powerful. So much depth to the paintings, and a really emotional song. I had to go back and take a closer look at "the weeping rose" at around 2.22
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funkyaxe

An incredibly strong performance both lyrically and vocally. The subject matter is very very dark but sung with an amazing amount of soul and conviction. This combined with your paintings that are so original and powerful makes for a journey of great art and accomplishment.
I would love to work on a new arrangement for this as the piano sound that you have is not worthy of the song and amazing vocals......let me know if yon would be interested.  Great work here.

Andy ( funkyaxe )

bruno

Powerful imagery - the art is fab, and there is lots of it - all of great quality imo - as Farrell said :)
Very nice track.
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Hook

You are an intense talent allysonmarie! A beautifully dark, captivating song and some seriously amazing artwork.
Rock On!

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Because the Hook brings you back
I ain't tellin' you no lie
The hook brings you back
On that you can rely

Redler

Powerful music and paintings!
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allysonmarie

I'm grateful you could take a look. Not many have really seen my art so I appreciate your feedback. Writing this song and distracting myself with the work itself helped me through a difficult time--the usual story behind my music I guess. Thank you for listening. 

SwanSong

Hi . simply marvelous all of your songs so far. the paintings are very professional
and very artistic. as well as your music. this song has so much meaning . and
your vocal. s are well done. and I love how you play the piano . that is also
a great talent. congrats. and I only wish the best for you NEIL.!!