"Ashes" a Hook original

[Hook]

My first recording playing the Yamaha YDD-60 drumkit. All tracks except drums were recorded in Nissan Sentra Studios. The piano is using Garagebands smart keys & bass is Thumbjams bowed bass
1- Grand piano (GB) (stereo)
1- drums (mono)
1- bowed bass (TJ)
2- mandolin tracks
1- vocal (stereo)

Ashes

written & performed by Hook

Can I call on you tomorrow?
Can I count on you today?
Would you still stand by my side?
 Or have I burned that bridge away

Ashes to ashes, not quite dust
My smooth, sleek finish is beginning to rust
This carefully crafted façade
Up to now I have maintained
& as the curtain falls
It becomes clear who's to blame

Can I meet you in the middle?
Or is it much too late for that
I'm not sure who I should portray
Can you help me pick a hat?

Spread myself to thin
I put Vaseline where butter should have been
I've spoiled all my soil
& there will be no harvest at all
& there will be no harvest at all
& time slows down to a crawl

Can I offer an alternative, perhaps a better day
A golden path with flashing arrows
That light up the way

Where spirits lift or leave or come
I don't think I know
Spirits tied between the lines
Next to the ebb but under the flow

Ashes fall like rain & coat the world
A second skin
Will mystery remain for the next of kin?

[Mike_S]

Lovely stuff. I really like the vocals and tone in the voice. Reminding me of Ian Gillan (Deep Purple) a little - nice warm tone.

[Redler]

Wonderful tune and superb execution on each way! Rock on!

[Greeny]

So good. I love the mandolins especially, but the whole arrangement is beautiful - and lush. Feels like a really well-crafted song with huge amounts of depth and poignancy. Lovely stuff.

"I put Vaseline where butter should have been"

...Last Tango in Paris??!

[Hilary]

"I put Vaseline where butter should have been"

...Last Tango in Paris??!

Oh I'm really trying not to comment on that one 

It sounds great Hook, softer on the vox than some of your originals and the mando is a great addition.

[The Gobi Desert Canoe Club]

Don't yer just love that Garageband. This is superb. Ticks all the boxes and some I don't even know about.  Roscoe

[bruno]

Great track Bro - excellent sounds, piano sounds awesome, along with the mando, lyrics and vox.
flippin A1
:-)
B

[Kenny B]

Excellent song Hook!!!   All sounds fantastic.  Especially the piano and mandolins.  Great composition!!!

kb

[ODH]

Abrupt.  Nice

Great sounds.  Nice mix of real and virtual instrumentation.

[Jarle]

Nice song.

Lovely stuff. I really like the vocals and tone in the voice. Reminding me of Ian Gillan (Deep Purple) a little - nice warm tone.

I see what you mean, and I agree.