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Title: Mother Looking Down
Post by: Ray Brookes on January 19, 2024, 12:28:08 PM
Will never listen to music
Or gaze at a work of art
Will never speak a word or sing a song
Everyday breaks his mother's heart
Will never swim in the surf
No feelings to impart
The mother looks down at her son
What will he do when she is gone.

Will never run, walk or dance
Or picnic beside the lake
Will never go to a concert
No friends will ever make
Never changed the expression on his face
Just that unlucky break
The mother looks down at her son
What will he do when she is gone.

The mother looks down at her son
What will he do when she is gone.
Kisses him for the last time, her god will understand
Crying and gripping the pillow with both hands.
Title: Re: Mother Looking Down
Post by: StephenM on January 19, 2024, 04:16:04 PM
you did it again but even in a bigger way this time Ray... what a vivid tale of the all to common heartbreaks of life.

really super bridge work or instrumental... wow... the whole thing is as good as anything I have ever heard.

love the backing vocals as well... then that clean guitar at around 2:13 and beyond... a superb idea and a great mix there... this is like the most beautiful woman on the world walks into a room of hundreds and everyone stops to look at her...
Title: Re: Mother Looking Down
Post by: thetworegs on January 20, 2024, 04:17:13 AM
Another beauty Ray loving that break down and that distant guitar
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Post by: Ron D Bowes on January 20, 2024, 07:49:13 AM
Sad song and great production. Lovely full sound. Your'e lyrics are always thoughtful whether light or dark.
Title: Re: Mother Looking Down
Post by: Farrell Jackson on January 20, 2024, 10:39:07 AM
These are some thoughtful lyrics about similar events that pop up in the headlines all too often. A sad tale but delivered beautifully with emotional vocals and all backed up with some fine music. I knew this already but it bares repeating, you're a super guitar player, Ray! 
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Post by: godinqc on January 20, 2024, 12:21:48 PM
Great work ,very emotional song and lyrics .. Also really liked the production and guitar work.

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Post by: Johnbee on January 20, 2024, 02:56:25 PM
The dynamic approach to the music puts it amongst some of your best yet.  They lyrics are so sad and weave a story so depressing that make us all ask a question as to whether the mother is wrong........or right?

:) John B
Title: Re: Mother Looking Down
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on January 21, 2024, 04:51:38 AM
The intro had me thinking I was in for a rock/ blues song, but I love the way you mixed it up. What a ride..another brilliant song Ray. The change in tempo and music is just brilliant. Had to listen a few times because I kept missing some lyrics as was listening to the music too much lol.
Lovely lyrics too. You're such a great storyteller.
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Post by: Trist on January 22, 2024, 05:37:48 AM
as always you're a great storyteller Ray that makes the listener think, especially on this one . very different and interesting arrangment, a track that requires futher listening to catch all the cool music  and story.
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Post by: Bluesberry on January 22, 2024, 11:45:16 AM
Great song!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!so much good stuff on here.....flipping guitar solo for the win......it's a beauty
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Post by: the physics teacher on January 22, 2024, 12:04:34 PM
Wow this is great I should listen more often on the PC instead of my phone. very nice to listen to.

Corné
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Post by: Pete C on January 22, 2024, 02:59:41 PM
oozing with class ! Great song !

Pete
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Post by: Mike_S on January 22, 2024, 04:35:02 PM
So cool. A great listen... loving the quiet breakdown in the middle that then comes to life with that great solo. A story that leaves the listening wondering and wanting to know more. Lovely Ray.

Mike
Title: Re: Mother Looking Down
Post by: Pru on January 25, 2024, 11:00:02 AM
nice one unc. sad tale but told so well with top drawer backing