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Title: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: allysonmarie on December 27, 2023, 07:03:24 PM
15 Death of Loyalty.mp3

I wrote this some time ago while leaving one bad job situation for another bad job situation. Working through the worst moments with music always helps. If you listen, thank you for your time. It's been a while since I've posted my own work here. I'm happy to see the site is still thriving and still great music being shared.

The slow roll. A tank over bones.
Hear the crush. I'm beneath alone.
Aware enough to watch it roll away,
But I'm too undone to feel the pain.

Cut through. Removed.
Exposed with deep disgrace.
My sacrifice meant nothing for the years I gave.
My very life meant nothing for the years I gave.
Unforgivable waste of time.

This world I've come to hate
Will never change. Never change.
This world I've come to hate
Will never change. Never change.
My sacrifice meant nothing for the years I gave.
My very life meant nothing for the years I gave. 
Unforgivable waste of time.
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: Geir on December 27, 2023, 09:07:51 PM
So good to hear some new music from you. Seems like you had a tough time and I'm glad you found a way to express yourself in this wonderful song.

Hope things are going better now.

You have such a strong voice. Hope to hear more from you soon!
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: thetworegs on December 28, 2023, 04:07:06 AM
You have one powerful voice to this powerful piece hoping your next step will get you away from the fire
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: Zoltan on December 28, 2023, 04:30:12 AM
I like the lyrics. Even a simpleton like myself can understand them. Those opening lines especially are such attention grabbers. The star of the track are the vocals. Like others have already commented, such a strong voice and a beautiful one too. There's a lot of depth to it.

The piano and the vocals combined have this dark quality to them that fits with the songs theme. You're really doing a lot with such a few musical strokes.

Great listen and hopefully the song has already helped with the healing.
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: StephenM on December 28, 2023, 08:34:36 AM
I dig your vibe.... the emotion is evident in everything you do.  I have purchased a couple of your CD in digital releases so I have listened to you on my playlist.  It feels like you are growing in the recording aspect as well... The piano sounds good too...

cool Allyson

the lyrics melt metal!  and something I have felt at times over my many, many years of work.
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: Ron D Bowes on December 28, 2023, 11:53:53 AM
Good singing voice and good lyrics. Well composed piece but stripped down. Cool job. Trauma always brings out the music in musicians.
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: Johnbee on December 28, 2023, 06:53:25 PM
Such great emotion coming from such a powerful voice.

 :) John B
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: SE on December 28, 2023, 06:57:24 PM
That's a great vocal delivery powerful and clear, which suits you piano a cool listen!!
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: allysonmarie on December 28, 2023, 07:26:30 PM
Quote from: Zoltan on December 28, 2023, 04:30:12 AMThe piano and the vocals combined have this dark quality to them that fits with the songs theme. You're really doing a lot with such a few musical strokes.
Great listen and hopefully the song has already helped with the healing.

Yes the heavier piano was intentional. I didn't want to distract and fill space as I tend to do with piano at times...lol  The music met me where I was at. Glad to be in a better space now for sure.

Thank you all for your time listening and kindness to comment. My recording set up has come a long way and I look forward to seeing what new can be crafted in the new year.
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: hardlock on December 28, 2023, 10:18:09 PM
Lovely song. Outstanding vocals and strong piano. Captured the mood perfectly!
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: Bluesberry on December 29, 2023, 09:36:22 AM
Came back for another listen.......just spectacular really...your wonderful voice combined with the piano is a real beauty
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: BerryPatch on December 29, 2023, 10:42:47 AM
Beautiful song Allyson. Powerful lyrics and a really unique and haunting vocal. Sometimes people in life can be needlessly cruel and things don't work out but this happens to everyone and it's great to get it off your chest. I hope to hear more soon!
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: Hilary on December 30, 2023, 05:08:00 AM
Hi Allyson - a powerful piece of emotional art - thank you for sharing your journey with us x
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: launched on January 04, 2024, 08:36:38 AM
This song helped me today. Thank you
Title: Re: Death of Loyalty - piano & voice
Post by: TPB on January 04, 2024, 09:12:58 AM
This is great and from the heart great vocals
Tim
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