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Post Your Work => Original Songs => Topic started by: Ray Brookes on December 14, 2023, 07:36:57 PM

Title: Like A VW Bug
Post by: Ray Brookes on December 14, 2023, 07:36:57 PM
It's like she was the jailor
And I was the convict
She well versed
In the art of marital conflict
She could fire up like a battleship
Like a destroyer - like a dreadnought
And came with more baggage
Than the carousel at an airport.

She talked of starting a family
A day into the marriage
But I could not help thinking
About all that excess baggage
Her tribe would descend on us
Arriving unannounced by the car-load
Snotty-nosed cheeky unwashed kids
All as ugly as a box of arseholes.

The house is empty now
Everything went wrong
There's still marks on the walls
Where photographs once hung
The garden's gone to weed
The atmosphere turned off
That's about it for me
You might say I've had enough.

Remember making love one night
On our bear-skin fireside rug
I asked if she thought I felt like a Mustang
She said no, more like a VW Bug.
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Post by: Geir on December 15, 2023, 03:47:49 AM
What a great bleak song.

Great storytelling and a fabulous performance and production

Sounds really pro

I dig it
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Post by: Zoltan on December 15, 2023, 04:21:06 AM
I read the lyrics twice before hearing the song. I couldn't fathom how it would play musically, but here we are... Once again admiring the work of the master songcrafter.

I was slightly worried you might be AWOL from the action because of Christmas duties. I'm sure the Santa in swimming trunks is in high demand in down under.
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Post by: hardlock on December 15, 2023, 05:13:02 AM
Pure precision of composition and tones let alone a great story. You never cease to amaze me Ray. I humbly bow to your talents! 8)
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Post by: TPB on December 15, 2023, 05:15:22 AM
I guess VW bug is better than inch worm lol Smoking production loving the lyrics playing ok i like everything
Tim
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Post by: Farrell Jackson on December 15, 2023, 07:43:52 AM
I like the acoustic, swampy vibe of the this...sort of dark, sort sad, and a sort of a funny ending story. Great music and vocals Ray!
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Post by: SE on December 15, 2023, 05:47:45 PM
Cool stuff, guessing more than  one marriage, been there and read the songbook.
Great blues vibe, excellent  vocals and recording!!
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Post by: kenny mac on December 16, 2023, 04:33:07 AM
Love it,has tinges of Mark knopfler in there.
Great story telling ,and love it when the drums kick in.
Nice one.
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Post by: StephenM on December 16, 2023, 07:41:14 AM
foot stomping madness... I love it

this rocks... and howls

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Post by: Johnbee on December 16, 2023, 07:01:08 PM
Loving the acoustic guitar background.  Your lyrics are so relatable here.

 :) John B
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Post by: Jarle on December 17, 2023, 02:18:50 AM
This is an excellent song with great storytelling.
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Post by: thetworegs on December 17, 2023, 03:24:18 AM
Came with more baggage than the carousel at the airport great line sets the scene perfect production as always love the feel
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Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on December 18, 2023, 04:41:32 AM
Another classic Ray. Excellent lyrics, quite funny places  :)
You always tell a great story in your songs.
Music is perfect mate. Lovely guitars, love the slide guitar.
Top notch production and lovely vocals. 
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Post by: Mike_S on December 24, 2023, 04:16:18 PM
Some beautiful gentle guitar backing and love that haunting slide, But really it's the storytelling that is king. Very cutting lyrics, but just another top class track Ray... happy christmas mate.

Mike