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Title: One Small Candle
Post by: Bluesberry on October 10, 2023, 05:11:09 PM
I had the old saying "Its better to light a candle than curse the darkness" in my head and decided to write a song around that saying, as the starting and ending point for the lyrics....It started out fairly simple, acoustic folky song...but along the way it grew into this....I just keep tinkering...lol...Keith added some super awesome bass to tie it all together...

One Small Candle
written/performed/recorded by Dave Berry, with some assistance from Keith Berry on bass/keys
Dave: lyrics/vocals, acoustic and electric guitar, GB drums and organ/synths
Keith: Bass, piano, mellotron
recorded on iPad/Garageband
Its better to light
One small candle
Than curse at the darkness
Do whatever feels right
But don't hesitate
Sieze the moment that's upon us

Chorus: What's done is done
What's gone is gone
One of life's lessons is
Keep moving on
Always moving on

Storms are formed behind
Storms that we feel
That's revealed by the lightenings flash
But dont pay it any mind
Just enjoy the show
Unfolding into the past

It's not the load that breaks you
It's just the way you carry it through
Keep moving forward so that momentum is on your side
And most of all enjoy the ride

From morning until night
Laugh through the misery
Feed on the mystery that surrounds us
Cause its better to light
One small candle
Than curse at the darkness

Chorus...
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: StephenM on October 10, 2023, 08:21:05 PM
man Dave,
it's gonna take me months to get out of this one!  what the hell?  I can't describe this other than it is so you and yet not so you!  It is mouth watering aural delight... kind of like jelly in a donut or maybe apple pie and ice cream...it is just so sprinkling madness greats.  I am laughing thinking of being pulverized by this amazing soundscape for 6 or 7 minutes.
yeah the bass is wicked  EPIC ENDING TOO
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Zoltan on October 11, 2023, 03:36:34 AM
I was walking in the autumn rain while listening to this. Enjoying the sounds, taking in that character filled Bluesberry vocal sound. At first i didn't even hear the lyrics, but then suddenly the wisdom of the lyrics hit me.

A song that plays for the ears and soul.

(Ear soul music? :D).
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: TPB on October 11, 2023, 07:28:41 AM
It is always great to hear a DAve original nice job brother
Tim
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Farrell Jackson on October 11, 2023, 07:57:05 AM
Good stuff Dave! The song's production and chords bring to mind Jeff Lynn's (ELO) massive style of production. Keith did well on the bass, piano and melotron. I just got to the proggy outro section of the song and it's fantastic! The whole song shows your off your songwriting skills. Nicely done!
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: BerryPatch on October 11, 2023, 08:02:29 AM
I have to say, this might be your best production yet! You really knocked it out of the park (I love what you did to my bass, it sounds huge!). Like all your songs, it shifts through different moods yet it all comes together into one brilliant whole. Wasn't sure if I was going add keys to this but I'm glad I did, especially the mellotron. Wicked beyond words!
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Ray Brookes on October 11, 2023, 12:39:26 PM
You and Keith produce great songs, Dave. Excellent lyrics and love those chord changes along with the stellar instrumentation.
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: cuthbert on October 12, 2023, 01:29:02 PM
Man, that ballsy bass sounds fantastic - reminds me of 'Message From the Country'-era Move. And I always love some Mellotron - choir voices?

In any case, it all sounds epic, from the lyrics and vocals to the musical arrangement. Well done!
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: SE on October 12, 2023, 03:32:28 PM
This is massive, cool stuff, could it sound any  bigger!!
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: hardlock on October 14, 2023, 02:40:38 AM
Totally epic production. Dig the progression melodys embedded throughout. 8) 
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Mike_S on October 15, 2023, 03:21:48 PM
This is massive... epic. It gets really proggy, but 70's prog. Hearing shades of Yes in here or even a bit of Mountain. Man this is brilliant. I just love hearing tunes made in 2023 that have that genuine old classic rock feel. Like a big two fingers up to some of the auto-tuned, quantized, ultra compressed, over produced crap that goes for music these days. Well done Dave... backed up by stellar work from Keith.

Mike
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Redler on October 17, 2023, 10:48:57 PM
Brilliant composition and arrangement, everything sounds 'massive' on this! You guys are great musicians!

Top class production as well.
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: StephenM on February 16, 2024, 07:24:34 PM
swooped in off that sampler juke to hear this again... it is an epic journey of a song... sure prog would be a good descriptor but also sort of like some Elton John stuff from the mid 70's... has that sort of great feel... lots of passion, emotion, intellect... the keys do sound great and sure enough that bass is wonderful.. tight...the whole thing is tight..
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on February 17, 2024, 04:10:45 AM
Awesome song, I must have missed this first time around.
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Lurker on February 18, 2024, 08:31:13 AM
I love how the positivity of the melody supports the lyric. Listening, my minds eye was watching the closing scene of a film as the credits begin. The outro makes me want to keep listening. I was disappointed when it ended. This is a good thing.
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Pipes on February 20, 2024, 02:33:09 AM
Great

Nice chord progressions

..needs a few more listens to capture everything:)

Thanks
Nick
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Ted on February 23, 2024, 08:22:07 AM
Maybe I can push your Canada button: This reminds me of Celine Dion! Just kidding. In all seriousness: This triggered a Klaatu flashback. I can't put my finger on what it is. Maybe it's the Beatles-but-not-Beatles chords combined with BerryPatch's big fat dramatic contributions. The tone of the bass and the precision of the playing are amazing. Great job, father and son!
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Zoltan on February 24, 2024, 05:48:27 AM
This is what eargasm sounds like.

Klaatu barada nikto.
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: Ron D Bowes on February 24, 2024, 09:05:23 AM
Big sound filling the speakers. Cool composition and performance. Nice one!
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: StephenM on February 24, 2024, 12:37:23 PM
Quote from: Zoltan on February 24, 2024, 05:48:27 AMKlaatu barada nikto.

"Near the end of the film, as Klaatu is pursued by the U.S. Armed Forces, he urges Helen Benson to memorize the phrase, saying "There's no limit to what he can do. He could destroy the Earth... If anything should happen to me, you must go to Gort; you must say these words: 'Klaatu barada nikto."

had to look this up.
Title: Re: One Small Candle
Post by: TPB on February 24, 2024, 03:45:54 PM
Just as enjoyable the second time around glad this is on the sampler
Tim