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Title: This Time-Original
Post by: Johnbee on August 16, 2023, 06:15:41 PM
 :) Hi!

Newest.   Hope you enjoy it!

If I had wealth enough to buy the world
it would not change a thing. Some joys it could not bring
But something I always meant to do
and something I've never done
is give you every thing I've got.  The answers I never gave you
But this time I'll make it work
This time's for keeps

I know it's been too much
Could not have been much harder
Such a selfish man was I.  No small wonder you would cry
But of everything I have done through the years.  The various and sundry
The most important of them all.  The only thing that matters
is this time to make it right
This time you'll see.

I'm hoping you'll find a faith in me so you that can trust me
Can't guarantee the smoothest quest
but I promise you I will try my best
Somehow I hope you will find
that I'm a better person
Not the one who made you sad
but  another soul who can make you glad
that this time the best will come
this time for real.



c 2023 John Bowen Music

 :) John B
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: Mike_S on August 17, 2023, 03:39:50 PM
Lovely tune John, really enjoyed that. Some great chords and melodies.

Mike
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: hardlock on August 18, 2023, 05:13:26 AM
Love the piano work - great tones and overall performance! Flute's a nice touch. 8)
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: Ron D Bowes on August 19, 2023, 03:09:43 AM
Nice piano work. I always enjoy your stuff and this is no exception. Super vocal melody!
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on August 19, 2023, 12:35:51 PM
I love your chord selections and melodies John. Another cracking song.
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: Bluesberry on August 20, 2023, 09:25:05 AM
Great song.......I always marvel at your vocal melodies....so cool and hard to do I would imagine......you do it very well...
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: StephenM on August 20, 2023, 04:34:05 PM
wow, the piano at the off is so incredibly beautiful John...

has a really great sound and feel... and then comes your soft voice.. a very nice vocal track with lots of hope... lots of feeling...

drums are perfect and just at the right time... this feels so much like some of my favorite 70's radio stuff I really resonate with it... those producers back then really could coax great things in recording and you have done the "musicians" a really good effort here on the production... a very worthy track and a great listen!
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: karl1171 on August 21, 2023, 07:59:54 AM
Another great song, some interesting chord changes which work really well. Great production too.
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: kenny mac on August 21, 2023, 12:25:03 PM
Track 3 of my car play list.
The piano sounds so good as do the vocals and I love it when the strings kick in.
You always have great bass lines in your songs as well.
And a flute as well .
I would say it was a suprise but there's always so much happening in your songs.
Bouncing bows,pianos ,flutes.
You have it all.
Nice one.
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: Ray Brookes on August 21, 2023, 02:34:38 PM
Beautiful song, John. That piano intro is stellar and the entry of the other instruments is perfect. Great melodies and chord structure and the flute sounds so realistic. Exceptional arranging and musicianship along with a great vocal performance.
Title: Re: This Time-Original
Post by: Johnbee on August 23, 2023, 04:15:32 AM
Mike S , Hardlocl, Ron, Darren, Bluesberry, Steve, Karl, Ken & Ray-Thanks all so much!

 :) John B