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Title: Eschaton
Post by: WarpCanada on July 15, 2023, 04:22:12 PM
Hi guys been away a bit. This song came to me quickly, in about 30 minutes today.  It's about a kid who does not want to be dragged to church.
The word Eschaton means the final act in the closing curtain of time and reality, the last act of God, in the divine comedy, or the thing at the end of all things.


Eschaton

Walk on my own two feet
Dance in my funeral shoes
My necktie is gonna strangle me
This shirt is a prison shirt
This suit is a grave disservice
To someone who isn't dead yet.
Pretend not to mind
If they take it all away
Whatever means most to me.

here you go kid
here you go kid
and then they grab it away.

Make sure that they never see your tears.
The eschaton is a sepulchre.
Whitewashed and baptized.
Dead to sin.
And born to be born again.
Title: Re: Eschaton
Post by: StephenM on July 15, 2023, 05:04:26 PM
Warren,
this is amazing.... really really amazing... you talk about depth of insight... depth of desire..... depth of despair... haunting and beautiful at the same time... deep, very deep... I doubt my mind can grasp this but there is a place inside it resonates with... plus beside the vocals and lyrics the music is perfect for this...

it was worth the wait !!!!   
Title: Re: Eschaton
Post by: Farrell Jackson on July 16, 2023, 07:56:00 AM
Some very deep lyrics Warren...the more I read them the deeper they get. You've presented them well in this song!
Title: Re: Eschaton
Post by: Bluesberry on July 16, 2023, 10:14:17 AM
Wow....not what I expected at all.....fantastic song...so understated...unreal...what a job you have done here...it's mysterious and deep for sure........sublime....great one......
Title: Re: Eschaton
Post by: thetworegs on July 17, 2023, 05:30:24 AM
Love the performance in the vocal the music and the mix an excellent track
Title: Re: Eschaton
Post by: BerryPatch on July 17, 2023, 08:00:57 AM
Haunting song Warren! The lyrics have so much unique depth, I love how they take center stage here. The atmosphere is stellar, every desolate strum!
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Post by: Zoltan on July 20, 2023, 02:38:51 AM
Yeah, i didn't expect this :) Let's just all agree that it's best not to drag the kid(s) to the church.

If i was that kid... I'd leave such skidmarks on floor that they'd learn.

A great mood piece with a strong storyline.
Title: Re: Eschaton
Post by: TPB on July 20, 2023, 06:40:37 AM
SUBLIME is the exact word for this song I was one that was dragged kicking and screaming on sundays so can relate Fine song brother
Tim
Title: Re: Eschaton
Post by: Mike_S on July 21, 2023, 03:54:09 PM
I love the music Warren, that is really delicate playing and services the song perfectly. The words and the theme... yes really powerful and paints an intense picture. Churches and religion.... what a power they held - and hold - over so so many. I am not sure where I stand, I understand the pain they inflicted, but also conversely, the hope and comfort they have brought. But a powerful, haunting tune... great stuff.

Mike