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Title: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 17, 2023, 01:42:42 PM
Original funk featuring the Memphis Soul sounds of the Kenhorst Brassworx featuring sax solos by John Newly.

I know it's not proper English but for a song I claim "literary license".
Enjoy!

How can I stay with you?
You're such a mess now.
How can you expect me to believe you
Your life is a crying shame
You're working on my last nerve, so get out from my door
Take it somewhere else.  I'm tired of you stealing all the sympathy
When I get back you'd better just be gone
Get out from my door

(Sax break)

Cold hearted and nasty.
You have no endearing charms
It's hard for me to sympathize with you now
when I see only alligator tears
I cannot be objective now.
The signs are all around.
Try to understand what I've been sayin'.  I just can't connect with you
Please take your phoney friendship with you
I can't take it anymore
You're working on my last nerve
So get out from my door.

(Horn break)

You're working on my last nerve
So get out from my door.

c2023 John Bowen Music
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Ted on April 18, 2023, 06:27:37 AM
This started playing in the jukebox, and my thought was, Damn this is weird! Who is this? I tabbed over to look and thought, Of course!

This is so odd and off balance. It gaslights you into thinking it's not in 4/4, but it is. So appropriate for the topic of the song. Take your destabilizing chaos and go!

Super cool.

Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Bluesberry on April 18, 2023, 09:07:34 PM
Yes, it is comfortable and unsettling.....great sax sound......off kilter just enough to make it interesting without making one dizzy ....really cool song...really love the brass and sax...wonderful
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: thetworegs on April 19, 2023, 01:09:26 AM
That's some fab brass and sax as the others say an unsettled listen but addictive all the same ...
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 20, 2023, 04:32:20 AM
Thanks for listening, thetworegs, Bluesberry, Ted.

It almost sounds to me that you don't like it, or something about it. Unsettling?  So sorry.  :(

 :) John B
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: StephenM on April 20, 2023, 05:45:04 AM
John, I think that being unsettling doesn't mean I don't like it.  There are certain things in art that portray say a certain image or emotion.  Since this song is about an unsettling relationship, or something like that I would say you nailed that image with the music.  The music is clever as ever with your songs.  There is something though a bit different about this one.  The other day when I first heard this it stopped me dead in my tracks.  I literally did not know how to respond to it, so I didn't. 

The only possible comp I have is maybe Chicago.  Obviously not so much the ones that made the radio.  Chicago had alot of great songs that took dedicated listening to get.  They weren't designed to be background music or something to sing along too... they made you think, made you engage.  This is like that to me...
the brass work sounds fantastic as well... and very much Chicago... which imo is pretty special!
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Ted on April 20, 2023, 05:49:38 AM
Quote from: Johnbee on April 20, 2023, 04:32:20 AMIt almost sounds to me that you don't like it, or something about it.

Speaking for myself: This might be my favorite thing of yours that I've ever heard.
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 21, 2023, 02:21:23 PM
Quote from: Ted on April 20, 2023, 05:49:38 AM
Quote from: Johnbee on April 20, 2023, 04:32:20 AMIt almost sounds to me that you don't like it, or something about it.

Speaking for myself: This might be my favorite thing of yours that I've ever heard.
Thanks again, Ted.

 :) John B
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Zoltan on April 22, 2023, 03:10:53 AM
That sax playing combined with the bassline made me feel like floating in the air.

I for one knew immediately that this was a JohnBee song. His knack of doing super complex songs with layered melodies and lots of stuff going on at the sametime and STILL making them easy to approach is bar none.

There's so much earcandy in this one. From the classic JohnBee vocs to all those jazzy stylings.
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 22, 2023, 08:12:54 AM
Quote from: StephenM on April 20, 2023, 05:45:04 AMJohn, I think that being unsettling doesn't mean I don't like it.  There are certain things in art that portray say a certain image or emotion.  Since this song is about an unsettling relationship, or something like that I would say you nailed that image with the music.  The music is clever as ever with your songs.  There is something though a bit different about this one.  The other day when I first heard this it stopped me dead in my tracks.  I literally did not know how to respond to it, so I didn't. 

The only possible comp I have is maybe Chicago.  Obviously not so much the ones that made the radio.  Chicago had alot of great songs that took dedicated listening to get.  They weren't designed to be background music or something to sing along too... they made you think, made you engage.  This is like that to me...
the brass work sounds fantastic as well... and very much Chicago... which imo is pretty special!

Thanks, Steve!  I'm glad you clarified that for me.
 I've been a huge fan of Chicago's for more than 50 years, mostly of the original band which featured the late and great Terry Kath on guitar.  Sometimes my horns tend to sound like theirs but this one I was going more for the funk/soul sound in the horns where you have the baritone sax holding the bottom more than a trombone (Chicago).  If you haven't already, you might want to check out some Tower Of Power or some old Otis Redding, Booker T & the MGs, Wilson Pickett recordings or even James Brown.  That's what I was trying to capture here. I don't think there's a bigger fan of the Chi-Guys anywhere on the planet besides me and I'm flattered you're comparing me to them, but I was really trying to capture some "soul" here.  Chicago has done some soul but they're mostly pop/rock.

 :) John B
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 22, 2023, 08:26:54 AM
Quote from: Zoltan on April 22, 2023, 03:10:53 AMThat sax playing combined with the bassline made me feel like floating in the air.

I for one knew immediately that this was a JohnBee song. His knack of doing super complex songs with layered melodies and lots of stuff going on at the sametime and STILL making them easy to approach is bar none.

There's so much earcandy in this one. From the classic JohnBee vocs to all those jazzy stylings.

Thanks for listening, Zoltan.  ;)  I appreciate your kind words more than you know.

I got a confession to make to you guys.  "John Newly" is fictitious. But it's not me either (although I have much experience with the tenor saxophone I can't play anymore because of my asthma).  This is a program called Tenor Colossus by an outfit called Straight Ahead Samples. https://www.straightaheadsamples.com/.  The have a different approach to virtual instrument sampling which makes them sound super realistic and at a very affordable price.  How I came up with "John Newly"?  John, of course, is my real first name.  For Newly, I took the last three letters of my last name and reversed them (Bowen to "new", and just added the ly).

 :) John B
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Kenneth on April 22, 2023, 10:33:33 AM
This is fantastic! The horns are excellent. Your vocals are very good. It's hard to put a finger on the unsettling parts, but it works as a whole in an interesting way.
I would say this is a keeper.
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Farrell Jackson on April 23, 2023, 07:04:26 AM
I'm on my second listen John and the song is way cool. Like Ted mentioned, it sounds like an odd timing but it is indeed 4/4. Each instrument has a lot of movement, but your good vocals and lyric anchor them all down well. Yes, I also hear some of Chicago's off the beaten path style here. Good songwriting!
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 24, 2023, 10:33:07 AM
Ken & Farrell-Thanks so much!

 :) John B
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: chapperz66 on April 24, 2023, 03:43:26 PM
Personally I absolutely love this.  Sure, it's a bit strange - but there's nothing wrong with that.  I love the unusual and this has oodles of that.  Brilliantly put together and produced. 

Fantastic.

Paul
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 25, 2023, 01:34:17 PM
Quote from: chapperz66 on April 24, 2023, 03:43:26 PMPersonally I absolutely love this.  Sure, it's a bit strange - but there's nothing wrong with that.  I love the unusual and this has oodles of that.  Brilliantly put together and produced. 

Fantastic.

Paul

Thanks for listening and your comments, Paul!

 :) John B
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: StephenM on April 25, 2023, 04:14:47 PM
Quote from: Johnbee on April 22, 2023, 08:26:54 AM
Quote from: Zoltan on April 22, 2023, 03:10:53 AMThat sax playing combined with the bassline made me feel like floating in the air.

I for one knew immediately that this was a JohnBee song. His knack of doing super complex songs with layered melodies and lots of stuff going on at the sametime and STILL making them easy to approach is bar none.

There's so much earcandy in this one. From the classic JohnBee vocs to all those jazzy stylings.

Thanks for listening, Zoltan.  ;)  I appreciate your kind words more than you know.

I got a confession to make to you guys.  "John Newly" is fictitious. But it's not me either (although I have much experience with the tenor saxophone I can't play anymore because of my asthma).  This is a program called Tenor Colossus by an outfit called Straight Ahead Samples. https://www.straightaheadsamples.com/.  The have a different approach to virtual instrument sampling which makes them sound super realistic and at a very affordable price.  How I came up with "John Newly"?  John, of course, is my real first name.  For Newly, I took the last three letters of my last name and reversed them (Bowen to "new", and just added the ly).

 :) John B

don't worry John/// I already figured that out... it doesn't change anything... it makes me dig you more... next time don't admit it!
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Ray Brookes on April 26, 2023, 11:35:35 AM
Nearly missed this one. What a fantastic track! Love those melodic bass-lines and the brass arranging is first class. Excellent production and what in the world are those chords? Great work - well done, John.
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 27, 2023, 08:06:45 AM
Quote from: Ray Brookes on April 26, 2023, 11:35:35 AMNearly missed this one. What a fantastic track! Love those melodic bass-lines and the brass arranging is first class. Excellent production and what in the world are those chords? Great work - well done, John.
Thanks Ray! The chords are an assortment of various and sundry major and minor 9ths, 11ths and a few 13ths. ;)
 :) John B
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Frank53 on April 28, 2023, 08:05:34 AM
Very cool song. Good lyrics and structure. Killer horn arrangement.
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Ted on April 28, 2023, 09:55:49 AM
I listened to this in a car today. Sure it's got a great horn arrangement, and melodic bass part, and a rhythm that keeps you a bit off balance. I was reminded of the thing that grabbed me when I first heard it: the vocal. I'm going to try to put it into words.

This is not the commanding voice of someone who is used to being assertive in the relationship; it's the voice of a mild-mannered man who has been pushed to his limits. That's the beauty of the vocal delivery. I imagine the other partner in disbelief. They never imagined their lapdog would stand up on its hind legs and bite back. The dizzying music is so perfect for the scene I imagine. Someone's world is being overturned, and they never believed the day would come (although they should have). This could be the scene that immediately followed the events in "The Missiles of October" (https://songcrafters.org/forum/index.php?topic=32965.0) - the long-suffering partner reaches their tipping point. It's not the sound of an explosion; it's sadness, disgust, and disappointment; it's the final whimper of air deflating out of the weak hope that the relationship would turn around.
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 28, 2023, 03:09:38 PM
Quote from: Frank53 on April 28, 2023, 08:05:34 AMVery cool song. Good lyrics and structure. Killer horn arrangement.
Thanks so much, Frank! :)
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on April 28, 2023, 03:17:03 PM
Quote from: Ted on April 28, 2023, 09:55:49 AMI listened to this in a car today. Sure it's got a great horn arrangement, and melodic bass part, and a rhythm that keeps you a bit off balance. I was reminded of the thing that grabbed me when I first heard it: the vocal. I'm going to try to put it into words.

This is not the commanding voice of someone who is used to being assertive in the relationship; it's the voice of a mild-mannered man who has been pushed to his limits. That's the beauty of the vocal delivery. I imagine the other partner in disbelief. They never imagined their lapdog would stand up on its hind legs and bite back. The dizzying music is so perfect for the scene I imagine. Someone's world is being overturned, and they never believed the day would come (although they should have). This could be the scene that immediately followed the events in "The Missiles of October" (https://songcrafters.org/forum/index.php?topic=32965.0) - the long-suffering partner reaches their tipping point. It's not the sound of an explosion; it's sadness, disgust, and disappointment; it's the final whimper of air deflating out of the weak hope that the relationship would turn around.

....and the perfect ending would probably be the person being addressed coming up to this guy and KICKING HIM IN THE BALLS!!  !@013 ("You ain't kickin' ME out, Sucka')!

Cool idea!  %)!  !@004
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Redler on April 29, 2023, 08:54:52 AM
So good, John!!

Nice jazzy vibe and the sax solos are just brilliant. Everything has been put well together!

Enjoyable listening!
Title: Re: Get Out From My Door-Original
Post by: Johnbee on May 04, 2023, 04:33:26 AM
Quote from: Redler on April 29, 2023, 08:54:52 AMSo good, John!!

Nice jazzy vibe and the sax solos are just brilliant. Everything has been put well together!

Enjoyable listening!
Almost missed this one!  Thanks Redler.
 :) John B