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Title: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: StephenM on February 23, 2023, 08:25:02 PM
Soon you'll be coming home, soon you'll be with me.
Seems so long ago, you left me. 
I tried so hard to keep you here with me.
My love for you was not enough.
Drawn to another place you're heartbeat flew away.
Flew away.

And I hold onto this fantasy.

I'm hurting down inside I miss you so.
I'm holding on this fantasy.

Soon you'll be coming home, soon you'll be with me.

a couple of weeks ago I posted the first iteration of this.  I liked the overall idea of it and some of the actual song.  I went down this path to try and make it better.  What happened was I did a new version that I kind of liked but then I did a 3rd version, and I ended up not liking it.  I used a drum track to play along to and it was too fast and lifeless.  So I went back and heard the 2nd version and decided I liked the way it seemed to have life to it.... then I added some lead guitar and worked on the mix.

Jay Turser Strat
Ibanez A/E x 2 tracks
Epiphone bass with a crazy effect from the ME-25
vocals x 2 with alot of copy tracks and panning/various effects
Tama drums

I did this live at open mic the other night.  In that case though I only used the acoustic guitar plus plain old me on vocals... I thought it went well.  A song like this can be overwhelming...

I like this quite a bit.[url="https://songcrafters.org/forum/index.php?action=dlattach;attach=194536;type=preview;file"]Im_Holding_Onto (bandlab and audacity  mix).mp3[/url]
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: Rene Asologuitar on February 23, 2023, 10:41:59 PM
Hi Stephen,
I am so happy to hear you do this in an open mic.
This is a very emotional song, and I can imagine you singing this song and be fully "in" the song and be in another place. 
This recording is so loved, and I dig the melody and the lyrics.
Love this, Stephen!!!
Thanks for sharing.
Rene
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: Ray Brookes on February 24, 2023, 10:51:27 AM
A lovely emotive feel to this song. The backing/accompaniment is both simple and complex at the same time and very well recorded, Steve.
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: Zoltan on February 24, 2023, 11:37:21 AM
There's so much emotion to this track. It's kinda 60's in style yet it's more indie sounding than that.

You're really sparkling here!
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: Bluesberry on February 24, 2023, 06:14:57 PM
Oh yeah....I love what you are laying down here Steve......this is wicked wicked good...I'll say it again for emphasis.......wicked...........I totally love this........such a good sound/vibe/groove for you to peruse further........I'll give this another listen in a bit....and another....and another........and......".
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: DarrenG / The Devil's Toupee on February 25, 2023, 02:44:43 PM
Wow this is sounding great Steve. I remember the 1st version you posted, it sounded great then. This is much more fuller..really love the emotional vocals, the sad lyrics and the slightly downbeat styling. It is like a 60's song meets an 80's indie song. Great music throughout and production.
Well done on the open mic too. Always love your tracks.
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: launched on February 26, 2023, 07:04:00 AM
Wow, this is badass songwriting. Yes, wicked good!(A New England term, Dave stole it lol) I stare through an icy -1 degree window and the song fits perfectly well, winter sucks :)

Demands several listens, well done!
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: SE on March 05, 2023, 02:34:53 PM
In my opinion this is one of your best recordings, there,s lots to love, first off the vocals are excellent.
Then the overall  production is great  but the guitar is a stand out great stuff  loved it!!
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: Zoltan on March 06, 2023, 12:58:32 PM
This song lives inside my mind now. I hope i'm not going to rip you off someday and claim this as my own :D

Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: StephenM on March 06, 2023, 02:25:35 PM
Quote from: Zoltan on March 06, 2023, 12:58:32 PMThis song lives inside my mind now. I hope i'm not going to rip you off someday and claim this as my own :D



It wouldn't bother me if you did... lol... I do like this one... I have played it twice at open mic now... and I think I can get to another level with it yet... but I am not going to play it at the same place for a bit... it's intense..
Title: Re: Soon You'll Be Coming Home
Post by: Redler on March 07, 2023, 12:34:50 AM
Quote from: Zoltan on February 24, 2023, 11:37:21 AMThere's so much emotion to this track. It's kinda 60's in style yet it's more indie sounding than that.

You're really sparkling here!

Agree with Zoltan. I love the psych vibe! Widely panned guitars works so nicely!