Post Your Work => Original Songs => Topic started by: AndyR on February 20, 2022, 05:39:12 AM
Title: We're Done (LITLR) - AndyR Original
Post by: AndyR on February 20, 2022, 05:39:12 AM
Another Songwriting Demo for FAWM 2022
Song number 13.
I had a lot of trouble with this yesterday. I actually binned it. I never wanted to see it, sing it, or hear it ever again.
But I need the songs... I wanna be finished! So this morning, I took the only complete take I had from yesterday, did some trickery on it and here's the demo. The mic placement wasn't quite right, so vocal/guitar balance isn't what I'd want.
If it wasn't FAWM, I'd sit on this one, it could improve with a band arrangement - where it would work so much better - but I'm not sure I actually like the song itself. (I know others do - Mrs R does - but I don't)
We're Done
Words & Music AndyR -------------------------------- You still look so fine Like you did When you said you'd be mine We were only kids Soon we'll hear others say But you guys were the dream It always seemed That you guys were a team
But we're done So done And we won't feel ashamed We got out Just in time And nobody got maimed We're done
You know I love you still Always will I know you feel the same We tried patch it up And soldier on We played reignite the flame Soon we'll hear the whispers How selfish those two are How did they get away With so few scars
And we're done So done We don't feel ashamed Yeah we got out Heads held high Noone else to blame
If we tried like others seem To want us to behave To hang on to Some thing we cannot save
No we are done So done Let's not be ashamed Let's celebrate What we had Forget the pain
We are done So done Never feel ashamed That we got out Just in time And nobody got maimed We're done
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Title: Re: We're Done (LITLR) - AndyR Original
Post by: chapperz66 on February 20, 2022, 09:45:25 AM
I tell you what - I think it's fine. You are being unnecessarily hard on yourself -but then that's what being a musician is all about - isn't it?
It absolutely works for me. Yes you would undoubtedly be able to hone it here and there - but that's not what your current task is all about.
I spend hours faffing about with stuff which, to be frank, few others will notice, and even fewer will care. And often I don't even like it myself....
It is a good song and a great performance.
Title: Re: We're Done (LITLR) - AndyR Original
Post by: StephenM on February 20, 2022, 09:56:01 AM
I really enjoyed reading Paul's comments above...because it is true...very true Paul... one thing I would add to Paul's observations are that in the end we want to post something we are (proud) of? That we like or at least would not be ashamed to have others hear. Lets face it we pour ourselves into this "work" of ours.... that is why I like this site... there are others here who recognize the greatness that we share with each other...and acknowledge it... and even if someone comes on here and is at least trying even if the recordings aren't great, they will be encouraged. I really enjoy your work Andy and that has only grown in the last few weeks more with your courage to post these bare bone songs (that are ranging from good to damn good to great (that is just my opinion..ha for what it isn't worth)... I really do also appreciate all the amzing details that go into recordings like Chap does...
Title: Re: We're Done (LITLR) - AndyR Original
Post by: Mike_S on February 23, 2022, 04:42:44 PM
It's amazing how we all hear and see things differently. I think you are right this would sound good in a full band situation, but there is something about the naked vocal and 1 guitar that seems to tell a very honest story. For my money you have captured a lot of raw feeling, that sometimes can get lost when songs are over rehearsed. But it's swings and roundabouts... yes you can get better technical performances when you put more hours in, but there is just that enthusiasm and energy that is alive in buckets in spontaneous recordings like this. Loved it.