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Title: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Hook on July 06, 2014, 08:28:20 PM
This is another track from my Sunday session with Pan a week ago. The uke & vocal are Pan live, we had the mxl 990 and the uke plugged into the 008 simultaneously & I copied the uke/vocal track to create a stereo field and eq'd the track to make her voice rise above the uke. I'm really blown away that my 13 year old wrote this but I'm most impressed with the tempo she kept while performing, no metronome just instinct. I added bass and drums.
1 uke/vocal (stereo)
1 uke (mono)
1 bass
1 drums (stereo)
Electric City
written by Pan  performed by Pan & Hook
Verse 1
Can you feel the lights of an electric city
Burning down on us can you feel it
Can you hear the cries of an enslaved people
Yelling at us can you hear them
Can you find the truth in our lies
I think I'm lost in them can you find me

Chorus
We thought we'd broken out of jail but freedom's a bigger prison
We thought we'd made it out alive but we're dead inside
We thought we'd found the key but we were wrong
I feel the lights of an electric city
I was dead but they reveived me

Verse 2
Can you see the lies as they fall from her lips
She's deceiving us it's all a trick
Do you believe everything she's said
It's not real it's all in your head
Can you feel the light of an electric city
Burning down on us can you feel it

Chorus

Bridge
It's the insanity of humanity
After 4 world wars thought peace would come for sure
Sad but true and it all points back to you
But we're always wrong

Chorus

Tag
Can you feel the lights of an electric city
Burning down on us can you feel it
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Groundy on July 06, 2014, 11:18:32 PM
Wow..........
This is so good, The writing, playing, the singing, and Timing,
all this at 13!!!!!!!!!!
Briliant, just brilliant.....
Really well done, I am so impressed.......

Alex

Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Redler on July 06, 2014, 11:49:44 PM
Well done Pan and Hook! I'm impressed, too!! Brilliant lyric and performing!
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Geir on July 07, 2014, 01:31:43 AM
WOW !!  Again !!! WOW !!


I really like your style Pan (I'm assuming your dad shows you this ;))

Yep, I'm a fan !
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Jarle on July 07, 2014, 02:25:31 AM
Really good, I'm impressed. You are really talented. (I meant Pan, but the father has talent too. :D )
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Oldrottenhead on July 07, 2014, 05:09:14 AM
braw tell yer paw. love it.
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Bluesberry on July 07, 2014, 05:13:53 PM
Utterly fantastic.  I am really impressed by this song and the performance................I am just so totally impressed by this. 
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: allysonmarie on July 07, 2014, 05:44:07 PM
Very nice ending she sang there :) And I love those chorus lines. I hope she continues her songwriting, hook. Already with such great skill, just imagine where a few more years will lead.
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: cuthbert on July 07, 2014, 05:45:26 PM
Whoa! Sounds like your daughter's learned fast-strumming the uke well from her pa. :)

Excellent song and and production - I dig them drums, too.
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Hook on July 06, 2017, 06:07:29 AM
OTD bump. She turned 16 just a few weeks ago.
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Groundy on July 06, 2017, 11:09:35 PM
Great bump, Happy belated Birthday Pan, keep on playing....

Alex
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: Redler on July 06, 2017, 11:36:38 PM
Thanks for bumping this! Brilliant!
Title: Re: "Electric City" a Pan original
Post by: bruno on July 13, 2017, 04:08:08 PM
Awesome bump. Missed this the first time around - this is a little gem. Well done Pan, more please :-)
B

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