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Title: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 04, 2011, 08:24:38 PM
For my wife of 31 years.  My one and only love!

Thanks to Mr. Marc Halikas for the bass track.

Ellen, remember the first time
I looked into your eyes
Quickly a fire in my
lonely heart came alive
Could you not sense it by the way I was trembling?
My soul reached a new high when I saw you smile

Felt like a new beginning.
Your vibrant love was what
My heart was yearning.
This lonesome dreamer came alive
To the beauty that only your lovelyness
brings to my life.

My only love
Sent to me from the Heavens above
And when I see you smile
Suddenly I feel a joy that is so real
Easing all the pain
Cooling like spring rain


C 2011 John Bowen Music

 :) John B.
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: AndyR on March 05, 2011, 08:51:51 AM
Beautiful.

I was quite worried listening to the first half that I wasn't going to like the vocal when it arrived - I was enjoying the piece so much... Needn't have worried! Vocal fits the piece and the lyric perfectly.

Hope she likes it :)
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Geir on March 05, 2011, 10:32:54 AM
This opens so beautifully and then it just soars !!!

And yeah the vocals do fit perfectly !!

WOW WOW WOW !!!!

Great song !!
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Gu Djin on March 05, 2011, 01:37:34 PM
Beautiful John. Love it.  It has your trade mark keyboard sounds and a precision I can never emulate only admire.  Took a long time for the vocal to appear and I was thoroughly enjoying the sounds when - wow your vox popped in right on cue.  Nicely done my friend.

Leigh
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Gu Djin on March 05, 2011, 01:38:38 PM
Meant to add I love love the bass.

Leigh
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 05, 2011, 01:41:37 PM
Andy, Geir, and Leigh-
Thanks guys!

 :) JB
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Kenneth on March 05, 2011, 02:11:10 PM
A very pretty song with wonderful vocals, what a voice!
Sounds like it wasn't an easy one to do.

Congrats on the many years of marriage, we're 10 years behind you two.
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: launched on March 05, 2011, 09:23:27 PM
High class, this one, John!

Love it!

Mark
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 06, 2011, 12:27:06 PM
Kenneth & Launched-
Thanks so much!
(http://i52.photobucket.com/albums/g4/voclizr/wed2.jpg)
July 19, 1980
(http://i52.photobucket.com/albums/g4/voclizr/ey.jpg)
Her HS grad pic. 1977.  It's that smile that this song is about!

 :) JB
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Tangled Wires on March 06, 2011, 01:02:22 PM
The long intro is great, and it really hightens the anticipation for the arrival of the vocal. its really is such a brilliant piece of work, put together and performed fantastically well.

A lot of hard work and long hours must have gone into this, the attention to detail is outstanding.
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Greeny on March 07, 2011, 04:49:39 AM
The extended intro is so wistful and beautiful. There are some lovely melodies weaving in and out as it gradually builds towards the vocal. And man, what a vocal! This sounds like a classic 70's love song. It's an incredible and wonderfully crafted piece of work. WOW.
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Ferryman on March 07, 2011, 05:00:28 AM
A lovely song John, beautifully composed and arranged. It sounds great and it obviously was a "labour of love". I really like the long intro and the way it builds, that works very well. Great job!

Cheers,

Nigel
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 07, 2011, 08:37:49 AM
Andy, Tim & Nigel-
Thanks so much!  Labor of love?  Yes.  Absolutely!

 :) JB
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: SwanSong on March 08, 2011, 02:36:53 PM
Wonderful and lovely song beautfiul lyrics and vox.
well deserved bump to the top best regards NEIL
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 08, 2011, 09:30:58 PM
Thanks, Swansong!!
 ;) JB
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Spiritsong on March 08, 2011, 09:57:51 PM
What a beautiful love song, really enjoyed listening.
Thanks for sharing.
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 09, 2011, 02:37:52 PM
Thanks Spiritsong!
 :) John B.
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Oldrottenhead on March 10, 2011, 05:30:23 AM
playing catch up, really enjoyed this one the music is cinematic could imagine this playing out at the end titles of a romantic movie. like andyr i was wondering when the vocals where going to arrive but when they did they lifted the song further, remindeds me of christopher cross.

i hope the good lady enjoyed it . and in your pic you look remarkably like roger powel the keyboard player from todd rundgrens utopia, you have his looks and talent.

Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 10, 2011, 09:26:17 AM
Thanks so much for listening, ORH!

 :) JB
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: stoman on March 14, 2011, 11:25:36 AM
This is a pretty ballad and a wonderful demonstration of love. Nice piano playing and lead vocal. Reminds me of Dan Fogelberg.

Regards,
  Steffen
Title: Re: "Ellen's Smile" Original
Post by: Johnbee on March 18, 2011, 11:03:08 PM
Thanks!  Dan Fogelberg is a MAJOR influence on me and was one of my songwriting idols!

 :) JB